If you want to get a promotion at work, which of the following measure would you take?
1- do more extra additional jobs.
2- participate more actively or state more personal opinions in group discussions.
Since the down of the humanity, being successful plays crucial rule in the life of us. one of those successfulness always would be promotion at the job. I personally subscribe to the view thay, for getting promotion in the job we should be brave and indicate it to others with participating in more activities and also state on our ideas. I hold this opinion for the influence that we can expose to the chief and for the illustrating personality as a strong and adept person. In the following paragraphs, my reasons will be elaborated in on more detail.
To begin with, I cannot deny the fact that extra additional job indicate each person as and laborious person and have serious influence on the boss; however, every one can do this and it would be a simple and direct way. As a mater of fact, hardworking is a fundmental character for a good employee. On the other hand, better qualification of the individuals is assessed whenever we examin this on the group working and how we can deal with the issue and tackle them. As far as am concerned, administers are looking for such personalities. As a case in point, I remember that I used to be a shy person, there was no debait that however I had attepted to achieve succession and took attentions of managers, I could not do that, being shy and nerves in the group workings.
Another reasons why I beilve that we should have a voice, I mean states on our opinions, rather than just hardworking is that actually on tough situations, should people not be steadly, others cannot account on them; it means that during the working, the person take promosion who possess ability of managing and having a solution in the harsh situations. On the other words, the more adept on managing, the more aportunities in cominications and work places. To delve more into it, our presidents in the highschool was one of our teachers, he took promotion because he was only teacher who could overtake the matters arranging to take a budget for new equipments for science classes to speaking with angree parants who were not saticfied with the camability of other teachers. he was skillful person peseficly in the administration, hence his braveness.
Drawing upion the reasons that I mentioned above, although there are varaiety of exceptions that can be excluded from general rules, I feel that a good employee should have ability to oarticipate in the different activities and states in the ideas. Not only does it a sample of his camability to tackling the maters, but also it shows that how the person is adept and serious for taking promotions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this successfulness' or 'those successfulnesses'?
Suggestion: this successfulness; those successfulnesses
... crucial rule in the life of us. one of those successfulness always would be promotion at the job. I...
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Line 9, column 779, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
... with the camability of other teachers. he was skillful person peseficly in the ad...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, however, if, look, so, i feel, i mean, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77111111111 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80890031643 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515555555556 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.9622242514 48.9658058833 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.1875 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.125 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208586214676 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700529430259 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638217265691 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122517400222 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555205202357 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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