If you were given the authority, what would you do for the young in your hometown?
It is crystal clear that the young are the most important resource of any country. They play an absolutely essential role in the development and improvement of a country. If I had the authority to make situations better for the youth of my hometown, I would improve the economic conditions, eradicating most of the hardships young people confront.
One of the most outstanding implications of good economic conditions is that there are quite a few jobs with acceptable salaries. The incomes are consistent with costs, and young people can save money to buy a convenient home in the future. Hence, the young have hope in their future and make an attempt to achieve their aspirations. If there is not any hope in the future, people, especially the young, will emigrate to other cities or even countries to follow their wishes. My hometown, therefore, will miss their young human resources, having imposed a prodigious amount of money on the government to bring up them.
Another beneficial effect of a prosperous economy on young people is that both their physical and mental health can be improved. As I have mentioned before, the young can acquire an acceptable amount of money, with the result that they can spend more money on their healthy diets, sports, and leisure activities. Doing sports and exercises leads to physical health; similarly, doing recreational activities can lead to mental health by reducing stress as well as work pressure and by creating peaceful and relaxed conditions. Therefore, the boom in the economy preserves not only young human resources but also healthy ones.
Last but not least, another benefit of the thriving economy is a reduction in crimes. Research and statistics have illustrated that in an economic recession, young people carry out a broad range of crimes, namely theft, murder, embezzlement, and bribery. It stands to reason that criminal activities in a city result in a decrease in safety and security, an essential factor in the development and progress of any city. Thus, the young human resources, a potential factor towards the development, are wasted.
In conclusion, by taking into account what I have mentioned above, If I were given authority to ameliorate the conditions in which the youth of my hometown live, I would develop the economy of my hometown due to its beneficial effects on my hometown, three of which, that is, an increase in incomes, an improvement in health, and a decrease in crimes are of paramount importance. Additionally, I wish that all young people around the world would have the chance that they lead a healthy, prosperous, moral life in a society with a flourishing economy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
...t resource of any country. They play an absolutely essential role in the development and improvement...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06590909091 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84709417616 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511363636364 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3846464972 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.833333333 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4444444444 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176467018531 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049269654302 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049683001422 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997594900329 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537188157304 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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