If you were offered two jobs, one has average paid and you work normal hours (40 hours a week), the other one has much higher salary but you need to work long hours. Which one would you choose? And state your reasons.
It goes without saying that in the sophisticated and complicated world where we live, one of the needs of human being is that indulge in their moments and have a high quality of living. It is kind of skeptical whether a heavy workload with a vast sum of profits can be valuable and be good option or not. As far as I am concerned, If I had a chance, I mean, if I were given a chance to pick up one of those offers, it was more likely to choice the first option. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first impression is related to me as a Yonge person that have been entailing to idle the time away with both the household and close friends. Under the shadow of no doubt, the more balance we are having between work life and personal life, the more chance we would have to a resultful standards of living. Simply put, being materialist is nothing more than seething in the turmoil, in fact, it brings about that ones amass a plenty of material possession and always have obsession with financial things. While by contrast, those who have a regular work time, have far more peace of mind when spent a great deal of time with lover-ones that can be showed them more than money other things, like love, communication, and delightful are of importance.
Another equally noteworthy point, furthermore, corroborating my stance is that however, the first moments it seems we gain a higher salary for our vocation, as time went by, working efficiency is going to be diminished. It is crystal clear that working for several hours in succession can lead to our brains fail to come up with issue and works, in particular, those that are demanding and harsh. Hence, we could not do our best, afterwards we would be fired by the boss or the head of that department. Let me shed light on my point, it was a couple of years ago when I used to get a wonderful job. To cut a long story short, nevertheless, I managed my time to work from sun up to sun down during the week, most of the time I felt sleep in the workplace. To cut a long story short, due to the I was being monitored, I passed up that position.
In sum, I have a deeply-held belief; albeit, more salary can be charming and interesting for that group of the society, it is high time we did something to have better lives and professions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, while, i mean, in fact, in particular, kind of, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40322580645 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59527719067 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543778801843 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.9070001883 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.4 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9333333333 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102329377241 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034301136224 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268384231477 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0572553035518 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258214341528 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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