If you were offered two jobs, one has average paid, and you work normal hours (40 hours a
week), the other one has much higher salary, but you need to work long hours. Which one
would you choose?
It is an undeniable fact that career and income play pivotal roles in people’s lives since they spend one-third of their lives working. In this regard, some people prefer to have high-paid jobs which require long hours of working. On the other hand, other people are of the opinion that having a medium-paid occupation with normal hours of working is more favorable. I, personally, concur with the second group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, given the normal work hours, people will have less anxiety and stress, which is beneficial for their mental health. When people work for a reasonable amount of time during the week, they are provided with this golden opportunity to spend more time with their family and friends. Spending delightful hours with family and friends significantly soothes people’s minds. Moreover, they own more spare time to go on a vacation, and it is thoroughly advantageous for them to alleviate their tension and stress. On the other hand, working for long hours has adverse effects on people’s mental health since it augments their stress level. It is clear that earning higher salary cannot compensate for the heavy burden caused by cumbersome workloads. Therefore, although the revenue might be average, working for normal hours is more beneficial than working for long hours because it helps to maintain mental health.
The other reason worth mentioning is that, people are more likely to be prosperous in their profession if they work for normal hours. This is due to the fact people have more free time to spend on learning various skills related to their jobs. They are able to gain valuable knowledge about numerous topics that will be handy in the future for them either in their profession or personal business, which can result in higher income. My father’s experience is a compelling example of this. Working for reasonable hours at the office, my father had a noticeable amount of free time to learn about management and financial skills, and how to establish his own business. After a year, thanks to his normal work hours at his former office, he was utterly knowledgeable regarding how to start a business. As a result, he commenced his new profession, and ever since, he has attained more money than he used to. Indeed, working for normal hours, regardless of average salary, provided him this opportunity to start his own business and gain even more revenue. Had he worked for long hours, he would not be prosperous today.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that having a medium-paid job with normal work hours is more beneficial than having a high-paid career with more working hour. Not only are people able to unwind their stress, but they also have more time to learn valuable lessons that help them to earn more money and have higher salaries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...e other reason worth mentioning is that, people are more likely to be prosperous ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, third, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2393.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98541666667 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53415471196 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477083333333 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4829424934 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.772727273 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201091124729 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071945106125 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602865850418 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145839350491 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031970727725 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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