TPO 54
The article and the lecture are both about the high salinity level of the Salton Sea in California and its disadvantages for fish and bird populations . In this vein, the author of the article, by proposing three solutions, claims that it is possible to reduce the salinity of the lake. The lecturer, on the other hand, refutes all of the solutions mentioned in the text, believing that none of them are realistic are practical.
First of all, according to the reading, to remove salt from the lake, the lake's water can be pumped into some facilities in order to be heated, which as a result, the water would evaporate and the other materials, including salt, would be left behind. This point is challenged by the lecturer, and she posits that although this solution would reduce the salinity, it presents some serious problems. She explains that when water evaporates and solid materials are left behind, these materials can pose some health risks. In addition to salt, some other chemical materials would also be left behind that are toxic. Spreading these harmful compounds in the air, people would breathe them and it would cause severe damages to human's health.
Second, the writer holds he view that by transfering ocean water to the lake through pipelines, the salinity of the lake would be decreased. In contrast, the speaker argues that this solution can reduce the salinity; however, it requires constructing pipelines. She further continues that the government does not have enough resources to build these pipelines, especially that the ocean is far from the lake, and it is highly costly to do this project.
Finally, the author brings up the idea that the lake can be divided into numerous parts by building walls. The lecturer, however, opposes this idea by mentioning that this solution is unlikely to be practical for a long period of time. Given the geographic position of the lake, some intense natural activities, such as earthquakes, would destroy these walls. Therefore, although this solution can be used for a short while, these walls are likely to be collapsed dut to severe earthquakes. As a result, the high salinity parts would be mixed with the low salinity parts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...advantages for fish and bird populations . In this vein, the author of the article...
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Line 1, column 329, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...he lecturer, on the other hand, refutes all of the solutions mentioned in the text, believ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'views'.
Suggestion: views
...ns health. Second, the writer holds he view that by transfering ocean water to the ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 220, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... is unlikely to be practical for a long period of time. Given the geographic position of the l...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, in addition, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 10.4613686534 201% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1373.03311258 133% => OK
No of words: 367.0 270.72406181 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98910081744 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56238184983 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 145.348785872 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514986376022 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 419.366225166 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2989372405 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.4375 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9375 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.522940935322 0.272083759551 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163083927778 0.0996497079465 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140038970001 0.0662205650399 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301833375702 0.162205337803 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111350502427 0.0443174109184 251% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 63.6247240618 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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