If your friend want to reduce living expenses, what would you suggest?
-Find a roommate to share the rent.
-Refrain from purchasing new versions of smartphones.
-Buy less expensive food and cooking at home.
While the advances in society and economics make our lives easier, they have also brought the prices to spark and added to our living costs. People have to cut down part of their living costs in terms of food, housing, electronic devices, etc. From my standpoint, sharing the rent with a roommate is the most effective way to reduce one’s living expenses.
First of all, rent is, for most people, the most significant part of their living expenses. Unlike chasing the latest version of smartphones, paying for rents is indispensable since all people need a place to live. But, at the same time, rents make up almost half of the total expenses of a person. Especially in large cities like New York and Chicago, rents are always so high that many people cannot afford them. If they can find a roommate to share the rent, it would reduce 1/4 of the total expense on their side, which is a huge amount money that can be used in many other areas. Take me as an example. I used to live out of my hometown in Shanghai for three months for my internship, and the rent over there is exceptionally high, which is hardly affordable for a student like me. So I found a friend of mine working in the same company like me to share the apartment I rented. After that, my burden to pay the rent is significantly reduced, and I was able to use the saved money to get a brand new phone I had been longing for.
Additionally, sharing the rent with a roommate also means sharing things in other areas of their lives, such as food, transportation, etc. Once a person gets along with their roommate, they can help each other in many aspects of their lives, which can further reduce their living costs. For example, they can cook meals together, instead of ordering delivery as a perfect to save extra costs. For me and my friend in Shanghai, he used to share a ride with me since he had a driver's license and owned a car. In turn, I offered to make dinners as I am good at cooking. In this way, it was estimated that at least 5000 money are saved for both of us by the mutual assistance between me and my roommate.
In a nutshell, it would be best to find a roommate to share the rent for one to cut their living expenses, because rents always make up the most proportion of one’s expenses and living with others can reduce costs in other areas of one’s life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ssistance between me and my roommate. In a nutshell, it would be best to find a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while, at least, for example, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38320409917 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498850574713 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5013626822 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.736842105 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8947368421 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05263157895 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221002598325 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717226301041 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561396681939 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150802759244 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335963910301 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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