It is critically important that we change our lifestyle to achieve a positive lifestyle. Personally, I believe that we should work with friends who have the same goal. I feel this wat for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, people who have the same goal can support us when we have trouble. They may encourage us to try changing our lifestyle. My own experience is a compelling illustration of this. Five years ago, I tried to change my eating habits because I always ate fast food such as hamburgers and pizzas. Therefore, I could have a serious illness in the near future if I did not change my habits. At that time, my friend, Satoshi, also tried to change his eating habits to become healthy. We started to have a low-calorie diet like vegetables. However, after two months we started to try, I gave up changing my habits because a low-calorie food was not delicious, and I was exhausted. After that, he called me and encouraged me to keep eating vegetables and fruits instead of fast foods. Thanks to his call, I decided to continue having low-calorie food and now I stay healthy.
In addition, we can get useful advice from others who also try to change their lifestyle. Nowadays, we can contact others who give us helpful advice through the Internet. This point is exemplified by my own experience. Three years ago, I could not sleep well, but I did not know the reason. My goal was to sleep more than five hours, and thus I tried to change my habits. At that time, I posted my situation and troubles on Twitter. Two days later, a man who had struggled to sleep well replied to my post. He insisted that he could sleep longer after he stopped drinking a lot of alcohol, and he recommended that I drink coke instead of drinking beer. I decided to follow his advice, and I stopped drinking. As a result, I could sleep six hours every day.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people who share the same goal help us to change our lifestyle. This is because they can support us if we are in trouble, and we can get useful advice from them.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53034300792 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56562898436 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501319261214 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.1855196492 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.68 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.16 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177816683009 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531937105116 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064388554736 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140477361897 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.092698118498 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.4 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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