It is critically important that donation is used efficiently. I personally believe that an organization should choose how the money is going to be used. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, an organization can deal with troubles which are happened after donation. The organization use money to support emergency activities. My sister’s experience is a compelling illustration of this. Five years ago, my sister worked at an NPO. The NPO helped a lot of animals. Every day, it received donations from many people around the world. One day, there was a huge fire on a mountain in Australia. Many koalas lived in the mountain, and they were in danger. Unfortunately, the fire was spread over because the city government did not have helicopters that could be used to extinguish. After that, it bought helicopters and gave them to the government. As a result, many koalas were rescued. If people who donated chose how money was going to be used, the NPO could not buy helicopters.
In addition, we do not have to spend our time choosing how our money is going to be used. If we have to choose the way, we may be in trouble. This point is exemplified by my own experience. Three days ago, I donated five million yen to an NPO, and I had to choose how my money was going to be used. There were a variety of activities I could donate to, and thus I read explanations of each activity. Reading them took four hours, and then I was really frustrated. Yesterday, I donated to another NPO. This NPO used its money based on its decision, therefore I did not have to select activities to which I donate. Thanks to its system, the only thing I had to do was to write a number that I wanted to donate, which took only three minutes.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that an organization should use money based on its decision. This is because it can use the money to deal with emergency situations and we do not waste our time choosing.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56424581006 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74989182681 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497206703911 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.1487247295 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.8461538462 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7692307692 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57692307692 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271706501847 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751039270099 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781183585183 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186195649049 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380828952227 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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