If your friends want to change their lifestyle to achieve a positive lifestyle, which of the following suggestions would you recommend? 1. Be more disciplined and have a stronger will; 2. Work with people who share the same goals; 3. Consult a professional expert (a doctor, a nutritionist, or psychologist)
It is critically important that we change our lifestyle to achieve a positive lifestyle. Personally, I believe that we should work with friends who have the same goal. I feel this wat for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, people who have the same goal can support us when we have trouble. They may encourage us to try changing our lifestyle. My own experience is a compelling illustration of this. Five years ago, I tried to change my eating habits because I was really fat, and I could have a serious illness in the near future if I did not change my habits. At that time, my friend, Satoshi, also tried to change his eating habits to become healthy. However, after two months we started to try, I gave up changing my habits because I could not endure eating low-calory dinner because it was not delicious. After that, he called me and encouraged me to keep eating vegetables and fruits instead of fast foods. Thanks to his call, I decided to continue having low-calory food and now I stay healthy.
In addition, we can get useful advice from others who also try to change their lifestyle. Nowadays, we can contact others who give us helpful advice through the Internet. This point is exemplified by my own experience. Three years ago, I could not sleep well, but I did not know the reason. However, I wanted to sleep more than five hours and tried to change my habits. At that time, I posted my situation on Twitter. Two days later, a man who had tried to change his habits to sleep well replied to my post. He insisted that he could sleep longer after he stopped drinking a lot of alcohol and he recommended that I drink coke instead of drinking beer. I decided to follow his advice. As a result, I could sleep six hours every day.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people who share the same goal help us to change our lifestyle. This is because they can support us if we are in trouble, and we can get useful advice from them.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, well, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49447513812 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45959535118 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497237569061 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6848964732 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.7391304348 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7391304348 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182683823403 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573108037184 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066531317967 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142087082985 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914322524558 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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