It is critically important that donation is used efficiently. I personally believe that organizations should decide how they use their money. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, organizations can deal with troubles which are happened after collecting donations, which means that organizations use the money to support emergency activities. My sister’s experience is a compelling illustration of this. Five years ago, my sister worked at an NPO. The goal of this organization was to protect a kind of animal from natural disasters all around the world. It collected huge donations from many people, and it could spend money from them on its will. One day, there was a forest fire on a mountain in Australia, where many koalas lived. Therefore, they were in danger, and we had to rescue them as soon as possible. Unfortunately, the fire spread over because the city government did not have helicopters that could be used to extinguish the fire. After that, the NPO decided to buy helicopters and gave them to the government. As a result, many koalas were rescued because the fire was extinguished. If people who donated chose how money was going to be used, the NPO could not buy helicopters and rescue animals.
In addition, we do not have to spend our time choosing how our money is going to be used. Choosing sometimes requires a lot of time, and thus it may make us frustrated. This point is exemplified by my own experience. Three days ago, I donated five million yen to an organization, and I had to choose how my money was going to be used. The organization engaged in a variety of supportive activities, and thus I read explanations of each activity to select. I spend about four hours selecting actions I donated to, and which made me feel frustrated. In contrast, I donated to another NPO yesterday. This NPO used its money based on its decision, and therefore I did not have to select activities that I donate to. Thanks to its system, the only thing I had to do was to write a number that I wanted to donate, which took only three minutes.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that an organization should use money based on its decision. This is because it can use the money to deal with emergency situations and we do not waste our time choosing.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as to, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72660098522 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85604382633 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509852216749 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6069181105 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.76 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.24 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256353355777 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717106927029 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711587165824 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171235351117 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297201121424 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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