Imagine that you are a student at a university where there are long breaks between
semesters. The university requires all students to do one of the following for one month
during the break.
- Students must take a course which has no direct connection to their major (for
example, students majoring in engineering take a course in fine arts or social sciences)
Students must volunteer to work on a project in their university’s city or hometown to
improve some aspect of life in the city or hometown. For example, a student can work
with primary school children who need help with their homework.
During recent decades, one of the most significant and problematic issues for students have been spending summer break. A plethora of people contend that university students should have a plan for their spare time in order to become prosperous in the future. If I have to select an activity to do during the break, I would choose taking a course in spite of having no relation to my major since I think it provides me more advantages. My reasons are manifold, among which the most conspicuous ones are substantiated in the following paragraphs.
To commence with, the first exquisite point to be mentioned is the influences of attending a class in increasing our information and knowledge in a novel field. In other words, taking some courses, even ones having no connection with their field of study, they are able to gain their knowledge in an area which probably have not the chance to get familiar with. Briefly, the more courses a person attends, the more knowledge he possesses. For instance, it is my childhood dream to learn some pieces of information about fine art. For this reason, such extra class play a pivotal role in giving me the opportunity to reach my dream.
Beyond a shadow of a doubt, one of the most controversial matters in the high rate of unemployment, especially for graduated students. A large proportion of student cannot find job related to their major. Therefore, it is plausible that participating in more courses enhances one's chance to find a job in the future. According to a noteworthy statistics, conducted on young people in the range of twenty to thirty years old, reported one month ago, 7 out of 10 jobless people are those individuals who have a university degree. The results indicate that most jobless people are educated, on the grounds that they do not have any other skills and knowledge to be prepared for existing positions.
Finally, it is worth mentioning that the other alternative, work in a project in university or hometown, cannot bring pupils a noticeable advantage. Although at first blush, it seems that being volunteer for improving other people's life is invaluable, I believe that this task can be done by other persons and communities in the society. For example, tutoring children who have difficulties in learning is usually teachers' responsibility, or some charities who make contribution in these matters. Therefore, student should take advantage from their free time like the break.
To sum up, considering the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that taking a class which is not related to major seems more beneficial. Not only does it heighten students' information, but it also augments their chance to find and grasp a job. Furthermore, working in society for helping other people can be performed by others having required ability.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to take'.
Suggestion: to take
... to do during the break, I would choose taking a course in spite of having no relation...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o be prepared for existing positions. Finally, it is worth mentioning that the...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in other words, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2367.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04690831557 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90576644221 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55223880597 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3707871302 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.714285714 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242896586328 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705264165147 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516502391049 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139742618596 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708329666671 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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