Imagine you could improve the town where you live by changing one important thing about it. Which of the following would you choose to do?
Build additional parks
Construct more libraries
Improve public transportation
Use specific details and examples in your answer. Do not use memorized examples
There are many things in my town that require improvement, so that people can enjoy better life. In my opinion, if I have an opportunity to change one thing about my hometown, I would choose to upgrade the public transportation. In the following essay I intend to put forth my arguments to support my view.
To begin with, the public transport is very crucial for every citizen to travel from places to places. People usually prefer to take buses and trains for their daily commute because it is less expensive than their private vehicle. My town does not have well developed transportation system which is why people often face difficulty in traveling. It mostly affects the students and office workers as they must daily commute to their work place which is necessary for them. To be more specific, my university is in the city center which is 15miles away from my town. I usually take university bus that passes from my place. However, sometimes when our university bus did not show up , we have to take public bus. It was very frustrating to travel in public buses because they were not enough for the whole population in town. I must wait for an hour to find a bus to get to my university and because of this I often missed my classes. Therefore, if I get a chance to ameliorate my hometown condition, I would definitely revamp the public transportation.
In addition, buses are usually own by private transporation companies in my city, which is expensive for the people. This is because government do not do any work for the betterment of public so, the private company mafia has set up their own system. Also, they charge extra fare from people and because of this people often face problems. Moreover, the conditions of these buses are not good to be drive on the road but they pass the vehicle inspection. This is because the private company bribes vehicle inspector. For this reason, it result in high number of car accidents. This would not have been possible if the public transportaion system is properly supervise by government and they spend enough funds to make it better.
In conclusion, I think our town is in dire need of better public transportation which is very significant for the people. This is because, the transportation system is underdeveloped , and because buses in my city are own by private companies which do not obey any rules and regulations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78692493947 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7693174042 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481840193705 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7493578215 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.8636363636 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7727272727 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0959263984739 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340895531033 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342060522527 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.075408757666 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272785344743 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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