Increasingly, robots and computers are being used to do work that humans once had to do for themselves. Some people believe the effect of this change will be mostly positive and helpful for humans. Other people believe that robots and computers will take too many jobs away from humans who are currently paid to do them.
Which view do you agree with and why?
From a broad perspective, in the current state of affairs we face, in which the vast technology improvements becomes an integral part of modern societies, it is not far-fetched to presume that robots and computers play a vital role in these progress. However, to what extent does applying these advanced technologies make the human vulnerable is considered as a contentious issue. There is growing segment of people, who contend this idea that the merits of substituting the robots with human workforce outweigh its ramifications. I personally concur with this idea, and in the ensuing paragraph, the rationale behind this statement will be further elaborated.
First and foremost, robots work more efficiently. There is no denying the fact that making a mistake is an inevitable characteristic of the human. Indeed, rarely do individuals managed to perform particular job without any error, regardless of the amount of efforts or attention they allocate. Actually, one of the constant factor has caused failure is fatigue. As a matter of fact, this feature give a sense of superiority to the computers. Therefore, having worked restless, robots enable fulfill the jobs with the highest level of accuracy which can be accounted as a crucial property in the modern societies. In addition, salary is another notable element concerning human working. The more people work, the more wage they require to earn. Undoubtedly, this obstacle is meaningless in working with computer, and people should not overlook the importance of this factor regarding decreasing the price of the production for the end users. Subsequently, eventually, the human benefits from the usage of computers in terms of obtaining the production with the minimum price and deficiency.
Another paramount point which should be taken into consideration is the issue of availability more jobs for the human. Needless to say that although computers take some jobs from the people, these robots should be created somewhere. In fact, individuals go for a job in other aspects which necessitate to gain more progressive knowledge and experience. Thus, the human releases from the mundane, meaningless tasks and gets involved with occupations that needs to acquire proficiency. It comes as no surprise to say that robots are not capable to undertake such these types of duties. So, if the human had not engaged in these new roles, he would not be able to augment his ability to carry out the jobs which could not have done before utilizing the robot in such immense scope.
To wrap it up, it is more judicious to say that having assigned the routine tasks to computers and robots, the human take a lot of advantages. This issue occurs not only due to achieving the high-quality commodities with reasonable price but also since creating new job opportunities which robots cannot overcome.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 735, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'earning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: earning
...people work, the more wage they require to earn. Undoubtedly, this obstacle is meaningl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in fact, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90077233702 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563043478261 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4150444482 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.727272727 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9090909091 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255767688459 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666863807911 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041462212355 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145944396842 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368408583403 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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