Independent Writing The government wants to fund one of the following areas to improve children's education. Which one do you think is better? Why? -hire more teachers to teach in a small class - make preschool education before kindergarten mandatory - provide some training courses so that teachers can be more professional
As an inseparable part of knowledge-oriented societies, the quality of children's education is one of the most primitive concerns of citizens, for which different procedures and approaches, such as hiring more teachers, making preschool education before kindergarten mandatory, and providing some training courses for teachers are nowadays being implemented. However, the question of what is the best choice to improve children's education, has aroused as the subject of controversy among the authorities. When it comes to my position, I strongly subscribe to the view that providing some training courses for teachers is the best option. I have some reasons, two of which will be aptly explicated hereunder.
The first reason worth discussing here is that providing training courses makes teachers more knowledgeable so that they will be able to choose an efficacious way to teach the students. In fact, the students cannot gain a panoramic view of the world, nor can they acquire lots of information unless their teachers attend the extra training courses. Moreover, taking part in extra training classes helps teachers keep pace with the latest technology and science in order that they can utilize new psychological approaches to discover the student's talents. In other words, the more students are aware of their capacities, the more eagerly they study. To be more specific, not only do trained teachers encourage students to study, but they teach the students effectively in a way that the lessons will not get faded from their curious minds as well. As a case in point, I vividly remember, when I was a high school student, my school provided some beneficial training classes for the teachers. At first, even though none of the students thought that the classes are helpful, after a few weeks we changed our mind. As a matter of fact, the teacher altered the method of training from theoretical approaches into experimental methods. My teacher was on the opinion that during the empirical lessons, she had more chance to get a better understanding of the student's strengths and frailties. Having finished the semester, she found that I had an extraordinary talent in biology, which really revolutionized my life due to the fact that now I am a successful biologist. Had the teacher not attended to the valuable training courses, I would not have had such a deep insight into my capabilities in the course of study. My personal experience competently corroborates the idea that participating in the extra training courses is beneficial for both the teachers and the students.
By the same token, another equally paramount reason to be mentioned is that students pay more attention to the teachers who attend training classes. As a matter of fact, the students have lots of difficulties to do their homework assignments at home owing to the fact that they encounter a wide assortment of obstacles which prevent them from continuing their studying; therefore, the students should take part in private classes to broaden their knowledge. By doing so, the students are not willing to withstand the class and usually, they do not respect their teachers. The teachers will be able to help students to tackle these problems individually at home, provided that they extend their knowledge through attending extra training courses and explain the materials more precisely in the class. What's more, the teachers can take advantage of the new technology and organize some groups in social network and keep in touch with students even at home. My own experience demonstrates this reality. When I was a student, I had a hard time dealing with mathematics problems at home. My parents get a private teacher for me to clarify the materials. Later, when my teacher attended the training classes, she gained lots of knowledge and explained the lessons more meticulously. Furthermore, she organized a study group in WhatsApp application for students who have difficulties in doing their homework. Afterward, I and my friends stayed quiet during the class times and would be able to do out assignments accurately. This experience sheds some light on the fact that providing training classes for teachers is really crucial to foster the student’s educational success.
By and large, according to the above-mentioned reasons, I firmly agree with this standpoint that providing training classes has a profound impact on the qualification of students learning rate. After all, attending training courses has a variety of unseen effects on student's education and success. It is highly recommended that government allocate more budget for schools to hold the precious training classes for all the teachers. This will give us the hope of having the chance to see a brighter future regarding our society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, therefore, well, after all, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, by and large, in other words, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 94.0 52.1666666667 180% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4019.0 1977.66487455 203% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 771.0 407.700716846 189% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21271076524 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.2694294524 4.48103885553 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93854505567 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 352.0 212.727598566 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456549935149 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1213.2 618.680645161 196% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1179451503 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.59375 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.09375 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78125 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150076510704 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439959463105 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387522317052 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10699228139 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04785816261 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 181.0 86.8835125448 208% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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