It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent's job.
without any shadow of doubt, choosing and commencing a job is an inevitable juncture in the life of most human beings, for nowadays, it is impossible to have even a simple life without money. People are inclined to various jobs according to their personalities, ages, skills, and traditions, to name but a few. With this in mind, some believe that it stands to reason that it is better for workers to do different kinds of task than doing same tasks in all days, while others hold the opposite view. I, personally, subscribe to the first attitude based on quite a few reasons, two of the most substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason is that in today's modern world, every company has to be in rush so as not to be left behind in contending for "field of competition" in order to gain more market shares, which brings them about profit, and thus fortune. innovation plays a pivotal role in acquiring more market shares. it is statistically proven that most leading companies enjoy bigger marker share due to their innovative employees. As a result, companies need innovative employees to help them to reach their goals, resulting in achieving more market share. doing various tasks gives worker a chance not only to expand their knowledge through leaning new issues, but also to provide their corporations with fresh ideas. Moreover, experiencing different tasks helps workers to be more mentally healthy in general and to improve their skills in particular, which leads to higher salary for them; or, to put it in another way, the more skillful one is, the higher income he or she enjoys. according to a research conducted in one of the most reputable universities in my country, individuals who are in better financial situation are happier.
another interpretation as to why I do not concur with the latter perspective in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that while workers do same tasks, even though they can be more professional in those tasks, it would be boring in a long time. I clarify my point of view with a real story that happened to me last year. I was working in library as typist. even though most of time I was free and had a good income, I felt gloomy with it, and it made me disappointed. Therefore, I decided to abandon my job and find new one. Now, I am working in company as a sale manager. Although I should work hard, I am really into my job due to the fact that I am often supposed to learn and try new things.
In summary, having considered all the aforementioned arguments discussed above, I firmly endorse my point of view that the merits of experiencing various tasks by workers outweigh those of doing same tasks on the grounds that it assists workers to be more mentally healthy, to be paid higher revenue, to enjoy more from their life and their workplaces that brings them about happiness, which is the cornerstone of welfare.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in general, in particular, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2414.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75196850394 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76995295001 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53937007874 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.4999962566 48.9658058833 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.052631579 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7368421053 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15442526963 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459139557662 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499569502623 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943526744691 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518143084769 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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