It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older
As living condition is increasingly improved, people tend to pursue the joy of life. the statement that it is better to travel abroad to visit different areas when individuals are young rather than when they are getting old. From my perspective, I agree with the above statement.
To start with, it is undeniable that having a long tour abroad when we get old is a terrific choice to relax. In big cities which are filled with tall skyscrapers, rarely can old folks find a natural park to take a walk. having an international journey outside to see the marvelous sightseeing offers the aged an opportunity to escape from the hustle society. when they are travelling around, they are lead to feel the miracle of nature and to see the difference of all kinds of cultures which is a great choice to improve mood and avoid diseases. my grandfather's experience can be used as a great example. he was a manager in an engineering institute where he was supposed to stared at drawing layout in the computer for a whole day and had no chances to relax and he often complained that he felt his vision became worsened . after retired he purchased the flight to hawaii without hesitation. During the tour, he totally releases his pressure since in hawaii he breathed the fresh air, appreciated the blue sea, enjoyed the delicacy, which are extremely different from the life in the company and even in his country. thus, it is obvious to see that for old people it is significant to travel abroad.
Despite the fact that having a journey abroad is joyful for old people, it unnecessarily means that traveling when people get old are better than travel abroad at young ages. For young people it is more crucial to schedule a long journey abroad to broaden their horizon which has essential influence on their future life. In nowadays, looking for one’s own value has been emphasized by well-established people and the young are strongly influenced. thus, it is even more important to realize the breadth and diversity of the world where the youth can create relationship with people from all over the world and feel various cultures. In this way, they can figure out what they are going to pursue and make decision by themselves , which are significant for their future life. my cousin's experience could be served as a great case. he was a university student who was major in computer science. he had no choice but to program and debug for earning a better future. However, he felt life was easy and boring so he planned a long travel which almost traveled around the world. after graduation he spent two years obtaining considerable income and investing all of them in travelling. he at the very first time understood life is colorful and he decided to follow his heart to pursue life value. he was impressed by those beautiful building in the journey, thus he came back he endeavored to learn architecture and now he has already established his own architecture company. Therefore, it is clear to see that travelling abroad when people are young could even changing one's life.
From the above-mentioned example, it is better to travel abroad when people are young rather than ones are at old ages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2654.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80797101449 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68792382886 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494565217391 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 838.8 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0236025754 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.076923077 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2307692308 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73076923077 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.5376344086 415% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172091699304 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590840356283 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105110081226 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183409447086 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922691745669 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.