It is better for the young people to have jobs similar to their parents. Do you agree or disagree?
The job is fundamental in people's life. Some people think that it is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs. However, others believe that it is better to choose jobs that are different from their parents' jobs because it makes them feel independent. In my opinion, choosing similar jobs with parents is a better option. I feel this way for two reasons.
To begin with, working the same jobs as parents is better because it saves time. In other words, it helps a person to gain the experience they need in a short time. For example, my friend was a student in pharmacy college, after graduation, he decided to work with his father in the academic field. His father and also his father's colleagues helped him too much. And also he was able to gain a lot of knowledge on how to teach the lecture in an effective way and how to deal with hard situations. In addition to that, he finished his master's degree in a short time because of the positive environment he was working in. If he worked away from his father's field, his father would not able to assist him.
Furthermore, working similar jobs with parents make life easier. That is because the social relations with parents' friends will give you many opportunities to develop your skills. When it comes to success in work and building a career, you need to expand your social circle. This will help you to realize your potential and choose what is working perfectly with you. For instance, as I mentioned before, my friend worked with his father as a professor assistant in university. Since he knew many professors, they helped him to choose which specialty is perfect for him. On the other hand, when I graduated from pharmacy college, which is far from my parent's career. I spent around two years until I knew where I could work and develop myself. That happened because no one helped me in anyways and I felt like I was lost. I wasted a lot of time until I realized my potential and chose my job.
To sum up, working similar jobs to our parents is ideal because it gives us the experience we need and also it helps us to select the right decision. We should follow our parents in the career they already built it and created a big social structure for us.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53316953317 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3997053831 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479115479115 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3396950961 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.875 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9583333333 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223929847017 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807682306386 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936180702986 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167186558946 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12919066557 0.0645574589148 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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