traveling to new unpopular places is a better option
Even though there is a popular agreement that traveling to popular places is better, I have a different opinion. I strongly believe that traveling to unpopular places is a better option. The basis of my opinion is educational and social perspectives.
Educationally, traveling helps people to grow smarter, when going to unpopular places. They will have a big chance to absorb a sea of knowledge since they will discuss an array of topics. Along with this, discovering new places allows them to use their strategic planning and thinking and enhance them as well. For example, last year, I set up on a journey to South America, I saw a lot of monuments and museums and I enjoyed myself with the most vibrant and beautiful beaches in Brazil. I met different people with different backgrounds, Even I couldn't speak one word Spanish or Portuguese. I gained a wide variety of knowledge. When people travel to new and unpopular places. They will be able to boost their imagination and creativity as well as their focus and attention. Indeed they would be able to improve their mental abilities and performance. As a result, educationally, traveling to new and unpopular places is directly related to brilliant mindsets.
From a social standpoint, traveling to unpopular places will improve their communication skills. When you get and meet people from diverse cultures, this will in turn enables the people to gather a variety of viewpoints. Moreover, traveling to new places aids people share their feelings and emotions. For instance, as I mentioned before about my trip to South America, I met people from different cultures, An old farmer learned me something special, he told me to dance with my heart and smile with my eye. Another wise man said to me when you feel stressful go to nature and touch it and don't take Tylenol to relieve your headache. Immersing in the local culture, helps people to strengthen bonds among other people. In other words, they would be able to expand their social circle. Therefore, socially, traveling especially to new, undiscovered places has a social impact on personal skills.
In conclusion, for all the reasons listed above, I encourage all for traveling to unpopular places. They will discover for themselves that traveling to new places had a countless number of educational and social benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05426356589 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83243975771 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524547803618 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6591101797 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0434782609 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8260869565 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360246812073 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122719556374 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.160779040301 0.0737576698707 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252139628294 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956584120695 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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