It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with that idea?
Undoubtedly, success is an important term in every person's life. There are numerous definitions for success, varying from person to person. In this regard, there is a more important thing than success, how to behave while failures. Although some may prefer to stay pessimistic and sad after every failure in their life, I personally believe that it is more advantageous for each person to face with a defeat in a different way and be pessimistic. I feel this way for a couple of main reasons that I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, it is neccasary to avoid getting upset after each fail to gain success again. To be more specific, people who are able to recover from previous challenges and learn lessons after fails, are more susceptible to find the way of victory. There are abundant examples of individuals who did not stop trying after they failed, so they gained a tremendous achievement. For instance, Tomas eddison invented electricity after thousands of unsuccessful laboratory experiments. Had not he continued his endeavors after defeats, he would have not invented electricity, the vital prerequisite of people in their life.
Moreover, peopel who are depressed after not gaining a significant achievement, may hurt themselves either mentally or physically, which even causes waste of money. Indeed, overthinking is the root of variety of disease that are not easy nor cheap to be cured. There are a variety of researches that have been conducted to prove the impact of stress on cancer. Scientist believe that there is direct relationship between cancer and stress. Moreover, a person who is depressed, can be mentally injured. In this situation, people avoid communicating with others and scape from talking to their friends and relatives. Thus, they may change to a alone people with a multiple mental problems, while they can significantly change their bad mood by interacting to their beloved ones, instead of going to a therapist.
To sum up, taking the aformentioned reasons into consideration, I am completely convinced that people should pass their failures and stay optimitic, not only because to learn lessons from their defeats and be successful again but also because they may hurt themselves, both physically and mentally.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'believes'.
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Message: The proper name in singular (Scientist) must be used with a third-person verb: 'believes'.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20380434783 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91991883117 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576086956522 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4048933845 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.388888889 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124426832034 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439528653123 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059154891159 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722956860131 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620908794836 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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