is it a good way to learn about countries by visiting museums
An individual's opinion on the decisive role of museums in the process of familiarizing with a country depends to a great extent on what they are aiming to learn about that particular country. While some might argue that the most important characteristic of a country is its heritage, opponents may claim that the country's current status and culture has more significance. I agree with the latter, and I believe museums provide little information about a country compared to studying the cities, culture, and people of that country. I will demonstrate further as follows.
Firstly, although museums can provide essential information about the past and sometimes current crucial events in a country, the real essence of a country remains in the day-to-day life and qualities of its community. In my opinion, culture can be recognized as the reflection of everyday interactions and habits of people. By familiarizing with people of a country and observing their lives, we are able to learn far more about a nation's characteristics than when we visit muesums. Additionally, museums usually portray the inheritage of a country, which in many cases, can be altered greatly through time, and it might not resemble the countries' current status. For instance, people in my country had another religion almost a thousand years ago, which is displayed in many muesums. Howeever, their current religion is different, and even in the pas fifty years, the religious atitides of people have changed greatly. Now, if anyone wants to acquire information on religion in my country, among museums or common people, which is a better refrence?
Secondly, an important aspect to focus on when learning about a new country is its social, political, and economic structures, which can be symbolized and properly presented in the city structures. When I visit a new country, I am eager to stroll through different parts of the city, and observe their resturants, entartainment facilities, public transportation, and other things of that nature. I believe by doing so, I am able to analyze many fundamental features of a country and its global status regarding prosperity and quality of life. As an example, when I visited dubai, I visited many commercial expensive landmarks of the city, which were indicative of a wealthy society that relied highly on tourism.
Conclusively, I believe studying the current qualities in a country, such as its updated culture and people's behaviors can contribute greatly to knowing a country. Also, the nation's city structures can hold a mirror up to its political, social, and economic attributes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, such as, in many cases, in my opinion, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24761904762 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00015494687 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516666666667 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8429981601 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.647058824 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7058823529 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58823529412 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24741007225 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776513063316 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695428882609 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149511003973 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924364250763 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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