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movies have more negative effect on how young people behave than positive effects

One needs to take into account numerous factors when addressing the various impacts of media on the youth. While some may argue that television and movies can be utilized as the means to import social knowledge into the younger generations' minds, opponents may consider them a two-edged blade with a far too strong of an impact to be controlled. I agree with the latter, and I believe while regarding the benefits and disadvantages of media on young people, its drawbacks certainly outweigh the advantages. I will demonstrate further as follows.

First, as young people have more impresionable characters and more suggestible minds, they make up the most vulnerable audience of the media. In addition to that, due to little life exprience and a thirst for learning the ways of life, young people are constantly looking to answer their own questions and find themselves. On the other hand, all the context in the movies and on the television cannot be controlled and screened in order to promote only good behavior. The presence of inappropiate and inaccurate information in such programs can pose a threat on the unshaped minds of the young. Therefore, I believe it is benificial for them to find the solutions to their dilemmas elsewhere.

Second, in order to profit from movies and televison programs, the companies, writers, and directors aim to make a context that is commercially desirable and in demand. In my mind, the most favorable kinds of stories presented in any kind of media are the ones that are greatly different from our everyday life. These programs promote a sense of excitement and wonder in the viewers. Regarding this speculation, we can refer to some of the most successful series that recently aired, like squid game or westworld. These are programs that are tremendously famous, probably due to their extensive innovations and differences with routine life, but also they have a clear display of violence and fawl behavior. Additionally, many young people are more prone to associate and fantasize about the negative characters in a movie. Now, let us imagine the great negative effect of such violent and ruthless characters openly exhibited in shows on the flexible minds of the youth.

In conclusion, although media can have some benefits, it is a vast uncontrollable ocean of information that can affect the young minds greatly, and it might do more harm than good. Also, as younger people are more at risk of change and suggestion, they can be regarded as the most vulnerable audience of these programs.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05952380952 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83713130802 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545238095238 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.709107808 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.055555556 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197731572631 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520008163515 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591408848399 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112816764215 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469780420437 0.0645574589148 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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