tpo 06
life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.
Whether living in today's societies is easier or it was more pleasant in the past is a convoluted question and has been a matter of argumentation among people for a long time. On one hand, some individuals concede that living in the past was easier because there were no stresses at that time. On the other hand, others believe that todays lifestyles are better since men and women have more hobbies to do and everything have been discovered. Personally, I acknowledge the former idea in spite of the fact that the latter one is more interesting and has more aficionados. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold. The rationale behind my choice will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
First of all, the medical innovations have benefited humans and cured a preponderance of diseases from which people used to die easily in the past. Researchers from RMIT university of Astralia have found that the discovery of "Penyseline" have prevented the death of almost one billion patients since the begining of 19 centry. As an illustration, my little brother suffered from lung cancer when he was 12; however, the duration of his cure was only two months, and he was released from hospital afterwards. Conversely, as my granmother told me a story of her young offspring, he died because of a simple headache when he was five-years-old. This example shows that lack of medical developments were one of the highest resaults of deaths in the past.
Secondly, technological advances have benefited mankind in this new era even though they may caused the disappearance of some traditional jobs. These advances have made new diverse job opportunities for youngesters and even adolescents. The introduction on computers, for instance, have created about one hunder new job titles. My roommate is a "quant" who is a professional programmer in financial industry and works for brokers which are specialized in stock markets. In contrast, adults in the past could only seek their fortunes in industrialized factories at best, and they hardly could start their own businesses insomuch as there were not different demands for their products and ideas. Scholars recognize that technology will have introduced 200 hundred new job titles by the end of 2050; this achievment could not be accomplished before this era. Additionally, these new opportunities increase the level of our living, so we can spend our time and money on the things we like more than our ancestors owing to the fact that there were not enough jobs in their time.
In conclusion, according to the abovementioned rationalizations and facts, living in this new world it better, in comparison with the time when our grandparents were young. Medical discoveries and inventories have prevented many inocents individuals from death. Moreover, technological developments have created scores of jobs for adults. Still, my opinion must not be considered as the only correct answer insomuch as hypotheses for this subject are not completely mutually exculsive. Neither my identifications are robustly true, nor do others have to be worried if their ideas are not the same as mine.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e hunder new job titles. My roommate is a 'quant' who is a professional...
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Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
... and facts, living in this new world it better, in comparison with the time when our g...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... technological developments have created scores of jobs for adults. Still, my opi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2673.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19029126214 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14922484392 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549514563107 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 844.2 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1128996613 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.217391304 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3913043478 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04347826087 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134722389336 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361930586911 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475257147609 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855732735787 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510276326523 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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