It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Building new building especially a large shopping center can exert a lot of change on its surrounding neighborhood. Many people believe that shopping centers cause a lot of troublesI am of the belief that building a new shopping center is very beneficial to the people in the neighborhood, and such a belief is based on the reasons elaborated below:
First, I think that building a new shopping center can provide many job opportunities for the people in its surrounding area especially younger adults.Working in a shopping center does not need a lot of prior job requirements, hence many younger adults with no job experiences can hold this positions. Although some people believe that university or highschool students should only focus on their studies, or work in the areas related to their field of studies, I believe that in today’s turbulent financial environment finding a job is a very difficult task even for those with years of experiences and almost imposible for those without any working backgrounds, and this types of jobs can provide a tremendous help for the younger people. My brother’s experience is a compelling evidence of this claim. when he started university, he had to take out a loan from the university to pay for his tuition. After a while a large shopping center opened near his dorm. Although he had no background working experience, he got hired. After some time wirking there, he was able to afford his university tuition without taking any other loans.
In addition to providing new job opportunities, large shopping centers attract people from other neighborhoods. I think When new people come from different places they create a more lively environment . Of course for some people, people from other neighborhood means more pollution and noise and traffic. However I believe that when people get together they will create a happier environment. This I think can be illustrated by my experience. Recently a new shopping center opened near where I live. After a while our empty neighborhood turned into a place where many people were commuting. The owner of the shopping center even built a park near it for the children to play. If that shopping center had not been opened, we would still be living in a dull neighborhood, unknown to everyone.
In In conclusion, and on the basis of the aforementioned agreements, I would like to reiterate that I believe that opening a shopping center is very beneficial. I feel this because it would create more job opportuinities, and because it attracts people from other neigborhoods.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, so, still, while, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06367924528 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03374698372 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478773584906 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 125.538198709 48.9658058833 256% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138867127339 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053512584179 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473257953302 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963993047795 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415911129885 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 10.002688172 290% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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