You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
In today’s turbulent economic environment, People are more cautious about the ways to spend their money than any time before. With current increasing inflations, it is very difficult to tell whether people should invest their money in a stable investment like a house, or should they risk their money on starting a business. No matter how risky it is, I am of the opinion that buying a business is far more beneficial than buying a house. I feel this because of two reasons: having a chance to learn and providing job opportunities. I will explore my reasons in the following essay.
First, starting a business helps us increase our knowledge and experience. Purchasing a business is like having the courage to step forward in your life and get familiar with the unknown. In another word, with a new business, we can provide ourselves a chance to gain knowledge from different people that we hire, from various troubles and how to tackle them, from the current position as a leader of a group and so on. By a way of example, my cousin, at the age of twenty, started a small business with two employees. Back then, he went through a lot of difficulties. He did not even have a place to sleep at nights and would sleep on a couch in his office. However, after around five years of hard work, his business grew. He turned into a very successful and well-known person. Although he did not have a high university degree, a high-ranked university asked him to teach there. If it were not for the experiences he gained through-out his way, he would not be successful today.
In addition, I think that a new business can provide job opportunities, especially for those young adults who are just graduated from college and have no prior job experiences. These days, It difficult for many people to find jobs commensurate with their interests, especially the younger people with no working backgrounds fail to find an appropriate job. By creating more businesses, we can assist many people as well as improve the economy of the country. For example, the company I am working in has more than four hundreds of employees. If the manager had decided to invest his money he might have been able to gain a lot of profit considering the inflation rate in my country. Nevertheless, my manager always insists on protecting people, and this point of view is very precious to me.
In conclusion, and on the basis of the aforementioned agreements, I would like to reiterate that starting a business is very beneficial. I feel this because buying a business will help me gain knowledge and experience and because I can provide job opportunities for more people
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: 'four hundred'.
Suggestion: four hundred
...e company I am working in has more than four hundreds of employees. If the manager had decided t...
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Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s more than four hundreds of employees. If the manager had decided to invest his m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, well, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77124183007 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85952173427 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522875816993 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5259648629 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2173913043 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9565217391 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0895302652535 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0260870706107 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269579464844 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0575382026678 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270476394625 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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