If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study. What would you choose? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.
We only live once, and there are a variety of choices in our lives that directly affect our future. Choosing a subject to study is one of the most influential choices that a person encounters in his/her life. I have pursued education in my B.A and M.A, and I am very grateful to God for this great opportunity. However, If I were given another chance to opt for a major to study, I would definitely pursue psychology, and such a belief is based on the reasons elaborated on below:
First, I think that a psychologist can cure peoples’ mentalities. In today’s hectic environment, many scientists assert that mental disease has increased unprecedentedly. The detrimental side-effects of mental disease on one person’s health, is as crucial as the physical disease, and it has to be treated and cared for similarly. The increasing needs to treat a variety of psychological problems, encourage me to choose this major. By a way of example, my father was forced to an early retirement several years ago. He was diagnosed with severe depression due to lots of pressure he had to burden at work place. When he got retired, he just stayed at home, and kept staring at one point for hours. However, thanks to his professional psychologist, his depression was treated, and he continued a healthy and happy life.
In addition to the psychologists’ ability to cure peoples’ mental problems, a successful psychologist can gain a handsome profit. The growing awareness toward the importance of mental health has increased the number of patients who visit psychology clinics every month on a regular basis. On the other hand, the money a patient has to pay to visit a psychologist is very substantial comparing to other areas in medical studies. For example, my friend who studied psychology has many patients in a week, and this job enabled him to buy a house and an expensive car after two years working. His job is quiet lucrative comparing to mine.
In conclusion, and on the basis of the aforementioned agreements, I would like to reiterate that I believe that If I had a chance to choose another major to study, I would choose psychology. I feel this because a psychologist can cure people’s mental disease which is an increasing issue these days, and because a successful psychologist can become wealthy after a short period of working.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, similarly, so, as for, as to, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95465994962 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16398866227 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544080604534 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4850528789 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.277777778 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0697387588436 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0226648960827 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398728154768 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0515089040055 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389359122366 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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