It has recently been announced that a new high school may be built in your community. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.
The construction of a new high school in my community could have a tremendously positive effect on the people who live here. The local teachers could obtain valuable job opportunities and high school students could have a chance to study in an advanced school. Personally, I would vehemently support the opening of a new school. There are a few reasons for that.
First of all, the new high school could be advantageously equipped. The current school in my town is out dated. It has a very small stadium, so, the students do not have enough space for their sports activities. Besides, the sports equipment is worn out. Because of that, parents very often have pay out of a pocket to buy new football and volleyball balls, as well as other sports tools for their children to play in the school. If the new construction took place, the fresh high school could be equipped appropriately and could have a bigger stadium for the students to play. Although the building of a new school could be extremely expensive and increase the school taxes for the local residents, it would eventually give the children of the community the up dated place to develop physically. That is why the new construction would be beneficial for the high school students.
Secondly, the new high school could provide employment for teachers who live in the town. The community I live in is a growing one. The massive apartment construction takes place here. Therefore, a lot of new families move in the town constantly. Unfortunately, the only one school in the town can not satisfy the demand in workplaces for the teachers who relocate to the town. The local teachers have to drive miles from their homes to work in the neighboring communities. If the new school was built, the local pedagogues could work right next to their homes. It will give them more free time to spend it with their families. It is true, that the new high school would not be capable of providing jobs for all unemployed local teachers, however, the majority of them would be employed. To that end, the importance of the new school for the community is incredibly high.
To conclude, the building of a new high school in my town could be beneficial for the community. This is because it could provide the high school students with the modern big stadium and create new jobs for the local teachers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hool. There are a few reasons for that. First of all, the new high school could ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...r their sports activities. Besides, the sports equipment is worn out. Because of that,...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...create new jobs for the local teachers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as well as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74572127139 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68534466577 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440097799511 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 17.0 3.08781362007 551% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.146430583 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.875 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0416666667 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190543406465 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726811179644 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555846951763 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147134167501 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0163004381904 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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