It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer
A well-developed city provides its citizens with facilities of entertainment and leisure like movie theatres, museums, water parks, shopping malls, community parks and so on. Considering our community to be a developing suburban location of the Dallas city, building a new movie theatre in our neighbourhood would be a good idea. I think it will bring more benefits for the nearby residents as explained below.
To begin with, watching movies in theatre has always been a common mode of entertainment enjoyed by the people. Convenience and accessibility to these theatres are crucial in enhancing their experience. For example, I and my husband like watching films every weekend. However, the nearest theatre is around 20 min from our house and 5 more min add up because of the traffic on the weekends. Thus, it takes almost 50 min of drive only to commute which is time-consuming and tiring. To be specific, weekends are for relaxation and not for getting more exhausted. Building a movie theatre nearby can save a lot of precious time of the residents and reduce traffic on the theatre routes.
Moreover, a theatre nearby will offer job opportunities for the teenagers of the surrounding communities. In today’s world, although challenging, yet it’s important to keep the young aged individuals away from deviant and delinquent behaviour. A recent research literature published in international Journal of Psychology claims that employment has a negative correlation with child’s deviant and delinquent behaviour. Thus, creating job opportunities for teenagers at movie theatres and similar locations could discourage delinquency, occupy their idle time in a meaningful way to earn money with work and effort, and provide them with behavioural training with positive identity.
In conclusion, I favour the plan of constructing a movie theatre in our neighbourhood. This is because this will bring entertainment at convenience for the people living nearby and because it will extend employment opportunities for the young people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 575, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a meaningful way" with adverb for "meaningful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...age delinquency, occupy their idle time in a meaningful way to earn money with work and effort, and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46226415094 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21341952273 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581761006289 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5778664703 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5625 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0647266149343 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0228556201412 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269648589122 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0460612818575 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020553131384 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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