Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
We come across various forms of advertisements everyday like TV commercials, banners, flyers; advertisements in newspaper, magazines and so on, which talks about consumer's benefits. Some people think that these advertisements tell a lot about the country; however, others disagree. In my view, commercials do tell us about the country, for the two important reasons.
First of all, we can learn about the crises faced by the country. It talks about the issues faces by the society and how the industries can intervene by spreading public awareness about the crises or advertise products to fight those crises. For example, In India, when we go to theatre to watch a movie, before the movie begins, there is a commercial showing the prevalence of smoking in the country, its adverse effect on the smoker and people around them, how it can lead to fatal and incurable diseases. Moreover they also show the interviews of the victims who suffered and later quit the habit of smoking, after which how their work and personal life improved significantly after quitting. Similarly, other TV commercial gives an example of how women’s health is still a topic of concern in rural India. Unavailability of proper women sanitation during menstruation leads them towards secondary infections and diseases. Advertising Company encourages the use of their affordable sanitary napkins to prevent gynecological issues among the women below poverty line. As you can see, companies advertise their products while spreading light on the country's major concerns.
Second, the advertisements tell us about the education system within the country. Every country provides education to its citizens in different ways. For instance, I was not so familiar with the concept of online education before I came to USA. After coming here, I often came across the advertisements of various online courses nearly in every professional field. Like, online business management course by St Augustine University, online courses for Physical therapist for earning credentials and so on. This shows how education is so accessible and approachable in USA, where you can work in one city and still seek course lectures, participate in class discussions, interact with classmates online from a desired remote university with in the country.
In conclusion, we can learn a lot about the country through advertisements. This is because it tells you about the major issues faced by the country, because it is used for marketing of the education system in the country, which the people might not know otherwise.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, similarly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2172.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31051344743 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9405956504 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567237163814 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5065936241 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.315789474 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247663792108 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799161099173 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627830317506 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166519623248 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422377391876 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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