It is important for governments to spend money to improve internet access rather than public transportation
All governments are trying to increase their people's life welfare and improve their lifestyle. There a lot of challenging issues which required politician’s great attention. It is a very controversial question that which task is in the top priority, and the budget should be allocated to it? Some people might think that developing communication services, accessing to internet for instance, is more important than enhancing public transportation. In my own perspective, I think it is more important for government to spend money to improve internet access. Following reasons and examples will elaborate on my opinion.
The first reason I want to describe is that nowadays, there are many of work and problems which demand internet. Many jobs, places required internet to work and perform services to their customers. For instance, all bank systems and money transferring rely on internet. By the internet someone could transfer money from one account to another within a second, and without any transporting. Imagine this situation in which you should give some money to your friends who is living in other country. If there was no internet access this procedure would be very costly and time consuming.
Second, Sophisticated and integral communication network in each society play an essential role in developing a country. Through internet people could be aware of anything in the world and visit their friends virtually and talk to them. Further people could benefits from internet in learning different things. So, it is obvious that the utility of the internet is more than public transportation which just could transport people from one place to another. Moreover, in my opinion, some of the demand in using public transportation could be declined by improving internet access. For example, it would not necessary to go to the library if you have internet access. Instead of going to library, You can read your book online. Another example came to my mind is, even you can order anything you want form online market which prevent going to the supermarket. Generally, improving public transportation has required more money than internet access and governments planned to reduce demand of displacement by enhancing virtual facilities.
To summarize my aforementioned arguments, I believe that, it is more important for government to spend money to improve internet access because internet has more function and a lot crucial work in any society depend on that. Furthermore, internet access could provide this option to reduce demand of using public transportation, and also it required less money to improve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36144578313 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97414610802 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498795180723 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2512339646 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7391304348 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0434782609 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436233585094 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124648871071 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131505596514 0.0737576698707 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292729295486 0.150856017488 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738959240943 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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