It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life
In the sophisticated today's world where we live, everyday media ranged from television to news websites broadcast a wide variety of news about different parts of the globe. In such a circumstance, many people think they do not need to follow the news. However, others believe that individuals should know the events and occurrences around the world and keep pace with the news. I, personally, concur with the latter group for two main reasons that I will elaborate on in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, in our progressive world everyone requires to be aware of the most important happenings around the world. If people know about the events, it is highly probable that they can take advantage of them efficiently. To elucidate on, economic undergo many alterations every day, which have an enormous effect on our life. In this vein, people who are aware of these changes can make the best decisions so as to make good benefits for themselves. For example, last year, while watching the news, I found that a huge profit can be gained in stock investment. Hence, I invested a specified amount of my savings in buying stock. Soon after, I gained a huge amount of money, which was beneficial for me.
Second, although some people think some occurrences around the world do not affect their life at all and learning about them is useless, knowing about current events and happenings is crucial for everyone. People who follow the news regularly can broaden their horizons and reach a profound understanding of the world. This knowledge and wisdom provide a sense of self-confidence for them, which is invaluable. They can easily negotiate with others about varieties of subjects, and thanks to their deep knowledge and information, their points of view will be important for their friends and families. For instance, my father has always been kept pace with the news. So, his friends and family consider him as a knowledgeable and well-informed one and ask him many questions ranging from the economy to political issues around the world.
Having the two mentioned reasons into account, I believe that following news is essential for everyone. In this situation, not only can people benefit from the happenings in their personal life, but also owing to the vast amount of information they have about the globe, they can feel self-confidence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, second, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03069053708 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7402418219 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554987212276 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7812188581 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.526315789 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233551717412 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669206510553 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771333094801 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146325051021 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368919926871 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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