it is important to know about events happening around the worlds
We are living in a complex age what happen all over the world may effect on our lives. Although some people believe that it is not important to know about events happening around the world, I firmly concur the idea that it is better for people to know about events occurring around the world. There are some reasons, the most important of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, it is undoubted that people are able to increase their information and knowledge about events to promote their lives quality. As a matter of fact, it is feasible that our life are not influenced by these events, but we can learn about these events to use their positive points making us better person. Since most events have an interesting background, studying them make us knowledgeable man. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to numerous prosperous people who can make better friendship with foreigner by knowing about their events. To demonstrate, there is a general consensus among scientists that having information about different events effect on people's lives. Hence, they established an experimental worldwide program to estimate the effectiveness of this matter on people's live. The results are surprising: approximately 90% of prosperous businessman establish a business for foreign people who are live in their country by performing their events to earn money. As a result, what I am certain is that the more people about others event, the more they would use their benefits.
The second reason why I agree with it is that, most people travel every year to foreign country. In fact, if they have much more information about their events, their trip will be enjoyable and memorable. The modern world offers abundant examples of people who attracted to others country events and prefer to go there again to participate in their events. Take a personal experience as an example, there was a time that my family and I went to Japan due to that they had specific event which they stated dancing in one time of the year. By watching this scene, I joined them to dance with them. My family members were curious how I know about their events. Had I NOT studied about their event before going there, I would not have participate in their event and made myself memorable day.
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effect of knowing about others event on our lives. Not only do people use this knowledge and awareness in their lives, but also they could participate in their event and make a memorable memory. For this reason, I highly recommend that people increase their information about different events because they bring them several lucrative consequences like what mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... age what happen all over the world may effect on our lives. Although some people beli...
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Line 2, column 587, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
...heir events. To demonstrate, there is a general consensus among scientists that having informatio...
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Line 3, column 731, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'participated'.
Suggestion: participated
...nt before going there, I would not have participate in their event and made myself memorabl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2278.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92008639309 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56266024622 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483801295896 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9812881403 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.476190476 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323817307231 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105344779463 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131652468562 0.0737576698707 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254924378193 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.176719189862 0.0645574589148 274% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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