Parents should allow children to make mistake and let them learn from their own mistake
We are living in a sophisticated age which children play a significant role in our hectic lives. Parents are always trying to make their children lives more convenient, delightful and successful. Some parents believe that children should make mistake and learn something based on their mistake, while others are convinced that parent should not let their children to make mistake. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, I strongly agree with the latter idea. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, obviously, parent should teach their children to learn from others experience. As a matter of fact, it is possible that others have experienced similar situation which enable these children to eliminate probable failure. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to numerous prosperous people gaining great accomplishment based on considering what others do in their life. Seldom does following one way that bring people success result in failure. Although finding similar situation may difficult for them, what results from pursuing the way which people did in the past are to save their time and money. Because, the processing of making mistake and changing it takes a lot of time and money. For example, the noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that approximately 80% of people children making great decision, are one who using others similar experiences. As a result, what I am certain is that, if children make decision based on others consequences, they will be successful in their future.
The second reason why I agree with it is that, undoubtedly, parent should consult with their children to make a great decision. In fact, they should teach children to consider all negative and positive aspects of each decision. Some decision may bring children several bad consequences and damage children’s mentally and physically. The modern world offers abundant examples of children prospering in the future by learning interact with others to make a great decision. Since, they are supposed to attend the society in the near future, they should learn make a decision by speaking with other to prevent any probable damage. Were I be a determiner in our country, I would have established a center for student to share their ideas and consult with each other. In addition to aforementioned notes, there is a well-known proverb in Persian, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this” the more children learn to help each other, the more they will be successful in their future”
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effect of presence of parents on children making decision. Not only are they able to use others experience, but also they learn how to interact with others. For this reason, I highly recommended parent help their children to make decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to interact'
Suggestion: to interact
...en prospering in the future by learning interact with others to make a great decision. S...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to make'
Suggestion: to make
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18315789474 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76285933224 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490526315789 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4309762668 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.909090909 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5909090909 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351581580527 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111511516633 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10742029102 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24307425189 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762913424181 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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