Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.
The remarkable and monumental changes in technology bring out not only a prosperous society, but also rapid changes of people’s attitude toward education. When it comes to the question if parents should allow children to make some mistakes and learn from them, some people are of the opinion that children will get significant improvement from the errors and problems. However, I consider that avoiding these mistakes can bring out these improvement and development.
Firstly, mistakes approves that huge pressure and negative stimulation to children. With the rapid development of economy and finance, the modern society is filled with fierce competition, which causes most people are facing vary of fails. However, as far as to children who are still studying in school sometimes can not moderate their mental circumstance into a positive status after facing some mistakes, especially even if paying more attention on it. Recently there are many senior high school students chose to suicide after failing in one exam in China, what a pity for these young life, there are many possibilities exactly.Therefore, in many circumstances, parents should not to allow them to make and face these problems because some of them are lack the capacity to deal with these questions.
Moreover, Some mistakes must not be admitted to make in one’s life. The rapid changes in this modern society not only bring out the improvement in people’s life, also bring out some negative influence, the drug and the alcohol. People are more easily to touch with them including our children, but for them, due to lack the great self-discipline capacity, addicting in drugs and alcohol are more common in this society, which causes them more easily to crime for buying. According to some surveys and date of crime rate of teenager, there are 12% increment than 20 years ago and 69%of them are addicting in drugs and alcohol. So sometimes parents should not allow children to solve these questions by themselves, which only causes them deeper and deeper.
Consequently, parents should avoid their questions and mistakes to guarantee their significant improvement in this modern society filled with positive possibilities and negative pits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 433, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this improvement' or 'these improvements'?
Suggestion: this improvement; these improvements
...t avoiding these mistakes can bring out these improvement and development. Firstly, mistakes app...
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Line 2, column 632, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...e, there are many possibilities exactly.Therefore, in many circumstances, parents should ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27683615819 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78012030563 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.3459776071 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.692307692 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2307692308 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303711752419 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110138326713 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103946816584 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208470254802 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513810289308 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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