Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on a team or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
Work is the most important part of our lives. In order to be a successful person, you have to work hardly to get a good position in the world as well as you can not escape from your responsibilities to work in the any field. Some people would agree that working independently is essential. Others would disagree. In my view, I prefer to work with a group of people on a team for two imperative reasons.
To begin with, working in a group is extremely beneficail to our development and progressing. When you are a member within a team, you will get ideas to compete with other members in the team, and you will discover a good things. Take myself as an example, when I was in pharmacy school, our professor ask us to do research about carcinogenic drugs, which was very hard to get a hug information about such drugs. I worked within a group of students. One of the student was astute that I benefited from him many thing because he had a bright ideas to organize the report. Actually, he helped me to figure out many things that were ambiguous for me about these drugs such as side effect, indication, precaution and therapeutic use of them. Finally, we got a good score, since we worked together with other students, and each one had an idea to add information. This experience taught me that working in a team make the person more confident and benefits for him.
Hence, in addition to the development, working in a group is motivating. In order to be active member, you have to compete with other, so this competition motivates you to participate in discusion and talking. For instance, one year ago, I read an article about how a businessman can develop his project. In fact, whole chapter talks about how the manger can motivate his employees to work in a group to make the business more effective and successed. It asserts that working in a team brings a lot of proposals from to team, so they can get acclaim from the management. When the team work together, this really will support a project. As we can clearly see that working in a group will push member to think and increase the productivity.
By the way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I concur that working in a group is more important. all we should work in a group sometimes to build up our personality.
Comments
To be honest with you, I
To be honest with you, I didn't check the grammer. I'm really frustrated about my essays. I thought I progress but my scoe went down. I don't know what I can I do. I need pass toefl test within six months because my deadline.
Well, don't need to be
Well, don't need to be frustrated. They are pretty little grammar issues and you just need to take 5 minutes to check them out after the essay writing. No body can help you check them out in the real TOEFL exam. You have to make it as a habit to check them out by your own.
Look at those essays you wrote those days, if there are no grammar errors, the marks are pretty high. It means you have made a great progress. Just keep on going.
Thanks a lot. I'm appreciated
Thanks a lot. I'm appreciated because your message gives me a hope and I will do the best. Thanks my dear
our professor ask us to do research
our professor asked us to do researches
One of the student was astute
One of the students was astute
working in a team make the person more confident and benefits for him.
working in a team makes the person more confident and benefits for him.
In order to be active member
In order to be an active member
to make the business more effective and successed.
to make the business more effective and successful.
When the team work together
When the team works together
all we should work in a group sometimes to build up our personality.
all of us should work in a group sometimes to build up our personality.
you will discover a good things
you will discover good things
Sentence: To begin with, working in a group is extremely beneficail to our development and progressing.
Error: beneficail Suggestion: beneficial
Sentence: In order to be active member, you have to compete with other, so this competition motivates you to participate in discusion and talking.
Error: discusion Suggestion: discussion
Sentence: In fact, whole chapter talks about how the manger can motivate his employees to work in a group to make the business more effective and successed.
Error: successed Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
Do you check out grammar errors after you finished the essay?
The examples in the essay are too long. Can you try a new pattern? You will need to develop three paragraphs in the essay body with less content for examples:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree.
Para 2:First,reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 2 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3:Second,reason 2 ,blabla... do the same thing like First
Para 4:Third, reason 3 blabla... do the same thing like First but shorter
Para 5: Conclusion.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 1819 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.404 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.608 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.882 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.454 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.167 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5