It’s better to relax by reading a book or watching a movie that by doing physical exercise
As heavier and heavier pressure has been imposed onto the shoulders of working force accompanied with the accelerating competition, a great many people seek to the most effective way to relax themselves in order to get rid of working pressure. Frankly speaking, I do not think this problem is an absolute problem, it depends on groups of people. Results are quite different as considering the manual workers and the white-collar workers.
Above all, as for the manual workers, a comparable quite relax way might be more appropriate like reading a book or watching a movie. For manual workers usually are required to devote enormous energy and time into heavy tasks, and those tasks propel people consume much energy costs. Builders, street cleaners, long-journey drivers are the precise example around us, we found that most of them have to get up early and start working. If anyway, it's impossible for them to do anymore things including energy loss after undertaking tired daily work. For instance, my uncle Jacob who is a bus driver has been required to drive along the same route for over 8 times a day, this sedentary work undeniably is a depletion to his physical strength, and the routine and boring work is a consumption to his mental energy, a weaken to his working motivation. Moreover, Jacob is an utter comedy lover, watching an interesting movie after tired daily work has been his habit. In his words, he believes that movies could catch his attention swiftly by exciting plots and lead him engage both in the brain and the eye. Then his body will enjoy a break and his inner energy will be restored, both his physical and mental state will achieve the extent that prepared him with better working condition. It seems that it's more preferable for manual workers in order to get better relax.
However, regarding to the white-collar workers, having physical exercise might be more ideal. That is to say, as manual workers manage numerous problems and tasks with brain working, their brains will be too numb to think about other things after abuse of their brain. Besides, plenty of white-collar workers have to fixed on their work places to read great amount resources and concentrate on computers without any physical relax, namely their bodies will feel quite uncomfortable. Thus doing physical exercise that can satisfy the demand of brain break and releasing physical pressure. Sorts of exercise can be picked: jogging, pilates, yoga, swimming or going to the gym, all can find their favorite by all means. The phenomenon that the proportion of mental labor going to the gyms has been accelerated for over 19 percentage during 2019s. Hence it proposes that the mental labor prefer to regard having physical exercise as their relax, and this inclination meanwhile reflects the ideal effectivity of having physical exercise to relax themselves.
Ultimately, as I mentioned above, the problem isn't absolute and I deem it with perspectives from different groups: to manual workers reading a book or watching a movie might be an appropriate relax; on the other hand having physical exercise ought to be more ideal to the group of mental workers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: are usually
...or watching a movie. For manual workers usually are required to devote enormous energy and ...
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... is a consumption to his mental energy, a weaken to his working motivation. Moreover, Ja...
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Suggestion: Hence,
...ed for over 19 percentage during 2019s. Hence it proposes that the mental labor prefe...
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Suggestion: isn't
...tely, as I mentioned above, the problem isnt absolute and I deem it with perspective...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, besides, frankly, hence, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, while, as for, for instance, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2641.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02091254753 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58725969618 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51711026616 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 822.6 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.2422920205 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.05 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273316176136 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796072890432 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813626446792 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166545741843 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778686056422 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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