It's important that we know about the events happening around the world though they do not affect our lives.
Some people contend that ordinary people don't have to know about the everyday news happening all over the world, as we have nothing to do with them. However, I hold the opposite view. As far as globalization was concerned, it's necessary for us to pay attention to the events.
Admittedly, a voice rises that the majority of citizens are normal people who don't have any rights to make decision for a country. In addition, even if they have understanding of events happening in the world, those events are still not relevant with them. However, with rapid globalization nowadays, whole world is tending to become an integrity, where everyone can be connected easily. Therefore, any essential events are strikingly corresponding to each person's daily life. I'll illustrate it in the following passage.
To begin with, owing to the trend of globalization, our living standards are specially affected by the events in the world, as the economy of one country correlates with others. It's generally acknowledged that the imports and exports is one of the most important support for Chinese GDP and the amount of trades with other countries is constantly increasing in these years. This is to say, if there is something wrong with other countries’ economy, Chinese people's equality of life can be affected negatively. Therefore, if we are focusing on the news about events every day, we will get preparation for the coming crisis and even diminish our loss as possible. For an example, the finance crisis happened in America in 2008 shocked the world economy. Chinese stock price was incessantly plunging into nadir, which led to the losses for every citizen. Many people had to sell their houses to compensate and pay for the debts. Also, many people lost their jobs, becoming the state of unemployment. Nevertheless, those who always focused on the news are more likely to predict such turbulent condition. So, they actually decreased their loss.
Apart from that, paying attention to the events is an excellent way for youngsters to make choices of their careers. It's common that the substantial events are deciding to the needs of working. To be more specific, return to the example stated above. The financial crisis had negative effects on the financial corporations and workers. The numerous financial white collars were fired by company in those years. For financial students in college, it was hard for them to get a chance of internship and find an ideal job when they graduated. The stock market was almost stagnant. Therefore, if the students were focusing the events, they would not choose finance or economy as their profession when they stepped into university. Instead, they can choose other more brighter careers, like being a doctor or programmer. In this case, I can safely draw a conclusion that knowing about events is an indicator for those young people with ambition.
In a nutshell, I maintain that people have to have understanding of news, no matter you are a juvenile considering your future or an adult worrying about daily life. Anyone who focus on daily events all over the world will bring back benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, apart from, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2624.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05587668593 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71041908161 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531791907514 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 832.5 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9897474259 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4666666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.43333333333 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234069038964 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507143555964 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616934505352 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126430228365 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386016189438 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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