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It’s not a good idea for people to move to a new town or a new country because of the loss of old friends. Agree or disagree?

Everyone will have the opportunity to get into a new place in their lives. This will raise the question of whether is it not a good idea for people to move to a new town or a new country because of the loss of old friends. In my opinion, I will definitely disagree with this statement.

First of all, moving to a new town or a new country could improve our practical skills by cooperating with new friends. Moreover, we can also use our vacation days to maintain our friendship with old friends instead of spending all of our time. My own experience could be a suitable example. When I was a freshman, I packaged up and moving to a new town in Tainan. It was the first time that I lived in a different place, and I didn’t know how to deal with lots of daily things in the first place, such as contracting with a landlord or repairing electrical devices. However, we encountered a couple of classmates having identical puzzles. Afterward, we decided to solve these issues together, like searching for the answers on the Internet or making a phone call with some landlords. Finally, we could take care of ourselves greatly by cooperating with other classmates and gradually adapt to college life. In contrast, if I still had chosen to live in the same town, I would not have had the chance to learn about how to plan my life.

Secondly, living in a new town or a new country could not only broaden our vision largely but also know local people by experiencing many different cultures. Furthermore, we can share these foreign experiences with our old friends. Take my previous experience, for example, when I was an undergraduate, I have been an exchange student in Germany for one semester. I utilized a large part of my time to travel around and attend many local cultural events, like the Munich beer festival and the Frankfurt car exhibition. In the meantime, I could totally immerse myself in the exotic atmosphere and discuss some historical points of view with local people, such as the rise and fall of the German Empire or the all-developing history of Mercedes-Benz. By contrast, if I chose to stay in the same country, we couldn’t appreciate a number of striking attractions.

To sum up, these are the two reasons why I disagree that it’s not a good idea for people to move to a new town or a new country because of the loss of old friends. Because we can not only boost our daily skills but also experience substantial exotic cultures.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...w place in their lives. This will raise the question of whether is it not a good idea for people to mov...
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Line 6, column 134, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... also know local people by experiencing many different cultures. Furthermore, we can share the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in contrast, such as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62557077626 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76558572048 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495433789954 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5138688995 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.3 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371873235547 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11783577495 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.189494132758 0.0737576698707 257% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306135627673 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1614910993 0.0645574589148 250% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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