List some benefits and problems of having young kids play sports!

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List some benefits and problems of having young kids play sports!

Playing sports have a significant impact in young kids because it help their physically development as well as mentally. Also there are numerous problems that can be faced during the time they play.
Although the sport is recommended for every person in every age, it plays a big role in youth generations especially.It is important way for them to develop their skills and to be tested by their parents if they can be successful athletes in the future. Moreover, they can make their parents and family very proud.The wining of the prizes can help them to pay the university as well.One of my friend was playing soccer since she was four years old and it helped her to became a symbol of success when she grown up.Thus, she won the games couple times, she was chosen as the best player of the year and without a doubt she made happy and proud all of us. Likewise, the prize that she won was an amount of 30.000 dollars which was more than enough for her to pay for the teaching school she was attending. This was a excellent benefit for her and her family certainly.
Even tough, in the first look having kids that play sports seems to be a gold trophy, it has its dark side as well. First of all, parents needs to pay a lot of money for their kids if they want to register them in a sport club.Nowadays, the sports club and the coaches are very expensive and this is a problem that many of the parents find it difficult.I enrolled my son to play baseball in our park district school. He is a good player, but I am having hard time to effort it.Every six months I am required to pay 1000$ for him to continue with training classes.This amount might not be a big deal for someone else,but I consider it a high prize.Other problem is the safety. It happened to my son last year to broke his arm. He was not allowed to play for seven months after that, and the pain was another problem of course.
In summary, people can get lots of benefits of having kids that play sports, but they should keep in mind the problems that sports can bring in their life, as I mentioned the amount of the money that should be paid out of pocket and the safety of their children!

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, likewise, look, moreover, so, thus, well, in summary, of course, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35891089109 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33774909398 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522277227723 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.234037921 48.9658058833 219% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 146.75 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6666666667 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230366715265 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104634844578 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892476586524 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193647560702 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955241709828 0.0645574589148 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.36 58.1214874552 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.6 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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