Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It is critically important for the people to use their lands in the most possible effective way. I am of the opinion that people should use the land for their personal needs. I think this way for some reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, we all know that in this earth the humans are the only creation that have logic. Based on this fact, I would say that people know better how to live their lives and what do they need to do or not to do to in order for them to be happy. People are aware that they have to work and produce stuff to fulfill their needs. The human being can not live without a house, so they can use their land to build a house. It is much easier and cheaper for us to construct a home if we have our own place, rather than buying a home somewhere else. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. Couple years ago when I moved in United States I did not have a place to live. My uncle gave me a piece of his land and I was able to build my own home with very little expenses. Because this place was in a rural area, I was able to create a modest farm. I have some cattle, chickens and few sheep. This helps me to save money because I do not have to buy meat, milk and eggs, because I am able to get those products from my little farm.
Also, using the land for our needs helps us to live a healthier live and of course if you are healthy you are happy as well. There is less stress if we use our lands for housing or industry. It can be much profitable for us. I say this based on my brother's experience. He lives back in my mother country which is Macedonia. He had his own land and he decided to construct a shoe manufacturer. In the beginning he started working with long hours and also he only had few employee to help. After five years he made good profit from there and now has fifty people who work for him. He no longer has to work as much as before and also he is the boss. He is not getting stressed or affraid of loosing the job. He become wealthy and he is happy and healthy. He is satisfied with his live, moreover, he is loved by his employee and this makes him feel even more better and incredibly happy. So, he used the land for himself and it made his live a sunshine.
In conclusion, I would say that we have to think first for ourselves, our children and society. How to make them happy because by making people feel happy you will be happier. If we have have lands the best choice is to use it for us and our loved ones by building houses and farms to fulfill our lives with happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: few employees
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, well, as to, i think, in conclusion, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 93.0 43.0788530466 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.06090373281 4.8611393121 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.13206970391 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453831041257 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8148593305 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.9 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9666666667 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.06666666667 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225824026263 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667507272398 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563036114907 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162862960576 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566055330108 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 11.7677419355 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 5.97 10.9000537634 55% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.54 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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