living with parents or on own?
Some people think that it is better for young adults if they stay with their parents for a longer time. They cite this reason thinking that the young adults are not fully matured enough to live independently on their own. They think that these adults might learn more at their home from their parents than on their own. However , in my opinion it would be better if the young adults live on their own and independent from their parents. I believe this because of the following two reasons.
First of all , the things that young people learn on their own and away from their parents are huge. For example , currently I am 22 years old and I have been living on my own since my high school. There is my friend of same age who lives with his parents. I have seen that as compared to him I have more socializing skills . This could be because of the reason that I have been socializing and talking with so many new people after the time I left my home . This could not have been possible if I was staying with my parents because most of the time I would watch television and do my homework only as all other works would be done by my parents.
Secondly , living independently helps to improve your decision making capabilities. For example , if I am living independently then I have to make all the decisions on my own , whether it be the coaching classes I join or the clothes I buy. If I was living with my parents then all these sort of decisions would have been made after the discussion with them , thus decreasing my decision making capacity which is very much required in a young adult. It is necessary for young adults to make their decision on their own because in life there comes so many difficult situations where they have to deal without the help or support of others.
In conclusion, deciding whether to live independently or live with parents is a complex topic. This is primarily because there are certain benefits of both the choices. However, I strongly believe that the young adults should live independently because it will help them learn so many things and also it will improve their decision making capabilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, in conclusion, sort of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56919060052 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46830702443 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433420365535 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7976007088 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2222222222 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328511121736 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123890206927 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0976815266661 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23508123675 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00188311046052 0.0645574589148 3% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.53 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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