Many criminals, upon their release from prison, return to society and commit further crimes. Why do they do this? How can the authorities prevent or reduce this phenomenon?
It is axiomatic that in today's sophisticated world, people are swamped with a plethora of problems, financial problems in particular, which may adversely affect their way of life. In this regard, they should find a solution so as to get out of it and feel a great sense of content. Although crime can be categorized into different types, by far the most prevalent one, in our society, is robbery, which I will also focus my attention on in this area. Since criminals are like other people, they will face numerous difficulties after being released from prison and the likelihood they commit a crime again is considerable. By taking these into consideration, I survey two reasons why criminals take their previous procedure and also will allude to two ways whereby authorities can preclude this phenomenon from happening.
The main reason for this dilemma lies behind the fact that thanks to the negative attitude of communities toward criminals, they do not show an appropriate reaction against them. By all means, others likewise have the right (are entitled) to be concerned about their security; however, they should strike a balance in their way of acting. Losing the trust of society in themselves, criminals will be unable to hold a position in any workplace, even a low-paid, low-skilled kind of one. Even so, they have no choice but to do an illegal activity to make a living. To the best of my knowledge, the pragmatic solution to this problem is providing criminals with an opportunity to engage in an activity, allowing them to raise enough money. For instance, the government allocates special fund for those firms which give the privilege of hiring to individuals with a criminal record who are inclined to put their abilities into practice rather than carry on their previous frivolous activity; then after a few years that they proved their honesty, the firm gives them a recommendation letter as a certification to offer to any workplace. Furthermore, it can also be possible that the government grants them with low-interest loan enabling them to run a business for themselves. The point is that paving the way for criminals to have a job sows the seeds of hope among them, and they never turn back to criminal pursuits that put them in danger.
The second reason for this issue has a lot to do with the fact that criminals find the penalty of robbery very low in comparison with the prospect benefit they can gain from. It is a well-known fact that when one makes a mistake while performing an activity, later, he or she strives to find a sound method so that never repeats it. To be sure, prison is the best place in which criminals will be able to entertain the idea of robbery and devise a precise plan to embark on it by sharing their thoughts with other criminals. In this way, should the criminals make a decision to return to the crime following their release from prison, not only will they avoid doing their previous errors, but they also give their best effort to minimize its risk; under such a circumstance, solving this phenomenon entails imposing more stringent regulations on those criminals who have not abandoned their illegal affairs. Given that the punishments are more severe, the criminals will give getting involved in a crime a wide berth. This means that strict legislation can deter former criminals from even thinking about a new crime since it will jeopardize their entire future.
In conclusion, both government and society provide the grounds for a crime to be repeated by a criminal. This is because when criminals are released from prison, people consider them as criminals again and never trust to give them the chance of holding a position, and because some criminals take the risk of being arrested by the police so long as the penalty of robbery is not so much compared to its probable benefit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...his regard, they should find a solution so as to get out of it and feel a great sense of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, likewise, may, second, so, then, well, while, as to, even so, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 52.1666666667 188% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3196.0 1977.66487455 162% => OK
No of words: 657.0 407.700716846 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86453576865 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06280665599 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68489267825 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 331.0 212.727598566 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503805175038 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 1018.8 618.680645161 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.41896351 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.19047619 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2857142857 20.6045352989 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330635507929 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999998984875 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742541360753 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216205627163 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719312853468 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 86.8835125448 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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