Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources, such as forests, animals or clean water. Choose one resource that is disappearing and explain why it needs to be saved. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
People are consuming natural resources with increasing speed because the number of humans are soaring every year. Therefore, crucial resources of the world such as forests, animals, or clean water are disappearing by the human consumption. Although all of the natural resources are important, I believe that clean water is the most crucial resource in the world. People need to save clean water from disappearing for two main reasons.
To begin with, water is the source of entire surviving creatures. Plants and animals need clean water to grow up. If the industries continue to emit waste materials directly in to the sea, ocean, or lake and polluting the water drastically, not only marine creatures continue to be effected, but also people and land animals eat more plants which expose and include those materials residue. For example, according to the New York Times, a variety of fish cannot grow because the number of plastic waste is the most effective cause on their life, and some of the fish species are in danger to be endangered. Another example is that chernobyl disaster, which is a nuclear accident, was occurred in 1986 at Ukraine and, the Black Sea exposed too much radiation after the accident. Even though it happened at 1986 and in Ukraine, radiation was still found in the sea until 2000 and more than 2000 people is contracted a cancer because they have lived around the Black Sea and continued to use the water that came from the sea. Thus, humankind is responsible to protect clean water.
The second reason is that people cannot able to survive without clean water. Every single person should drink more than eight cups of clean water every single day. For example, in the countries which are located in the continent of Africa, there are a variety of people who do not have access to clean water. Therefore, those countries are the top on the number of disease list, and people die because of diseases which are related to lack of clean water. As a result, water is the most important source to protect for people's life.
All in all, in many parts of the world, natural recourses are disappearing such as forests, animals, and clean water. I think the clean water is the most important source and should be protected. Otherwise, not only water become dirty, but also plants, animals, and people are effected. Humankind should be a protector for the clean water.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ring by the human consumption. Although all of the natural resources are important, I beli...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'materials'' or 'material's'?
Suggestion: materials'; material's
...e plants which expose and include those materials residue. For example, according to the ...
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Line 5, column 551, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...most effective cause on their life, and some of the fish species are in danger to be endang...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, still, therefore, thus, as for, for example, i think, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89215686275 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43774366875 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480392156863 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2574896751 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255732815978 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982127581923 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756187979805 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18351197627 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772363988118 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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