n some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
The trend nowadays is towards having a job while studying. This raises the issue of whether adolescents should be allowed to work while they are still students. As far as I am concerned, I do not support teenagers to have a job and the reasons to substantiate my view point are elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, having a job while studying would effect teenagers academic carrier. As a student, an adolescent's priority should be learning lessons efficiently, and he should study at least three hours a day to be successful. However, if he works in his leisure time, there could not be time to study. A personal experience of my brother is a compelling example of this. He worked in a company while he was a student in high school and his success rate was decreased after he started to work although the company is related to his field. He prepared one more year for the exam to enroll a university. Thus, it is not a good idea to have a job for teenagers because it could affect their success.
Another reason why I do not approve teenagers to work part-time is that they would not have sufficient sleep. As students, teenagers need to sleep at least eight hours every single day. However, if they work, their sleeping time would be decrease because they still need to complete their homework, spend time with their family, and attend some of the school activities.
Finally, working part-time and making extra money may contribute to their bad habits. Adolescents are not mature enough to spend money wisely. However part-time jobs allow them to spend money whatever they want such as drugs or alcohol. Therefore, if students work, they could have bad habits.
Based on above discussion, it appears to me that it is not good idea that adolescents have jobs while they are still students. Having a job would effect their academic success, their sleeping time, and allow them to have bad habits. Compared with their whole lifetime, school life is a short period. Teenagers should value their school life and make full use of the time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, at least, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80845070423 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5354710352 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507042253521 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1642762306 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2857142857 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9047619048 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254392095852 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086994181411 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821629345926 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164720136142 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854515670002 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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