In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
“Adolescents joining the workforce” is still a topic of controversy. Being into a job is very important in everyone’s life. Some people favour the practice of teenagers doing jobs; while others support the idea of teenagers focusing only on their studies. Both the practices have their advantages and disadvantages. Considering the age of teenagers, personally, I believe that they should only pay attention to the education and studies while they are students. I feel this way for the following reasons.
To begin with, adolescent’s participation in jobs takes their time away from self study and recreation. Teens are already struggling with what subjects they should opt for in their promising future career. They need time to discuss this with the family and focus on their study of interest, take extra courses to develop their knowledge in those subjects. For instance, when I was in 10th grade, it was the time for me to decide on my major for high school studies and so on. I always desired of becoming a doctor, for which I was supposed to take a course for 2 years to prepare for the entrance test in conjunction with my high school studies. I had a very hectic schedule consisting of school and extra classes of medical entrance every day. After 3 years of diligence, my dedication was paid off. I cleared the exam with the required passing score which helped me enrol in my preferred medical college. Admittedly, in that age if I was into a job, I would not have had any time to attend the medical classes and do my self-study.
Moreover, as an adolescent, seeking education with a job is physically exhausting. As the teens do not have much of professional skills, they are mostly given the work of waitering, long time standing jobs in theatres and shopping malls which is physically tiring. My niece’s experience demonstrates a good example for this. She belongs to an upper middle class family. When she was 16, seeing her peers, she also wanted to get into a job and earn money. She used to attend school classes in the day followed by her standing ticket collection job at the movie theatre in the evening. By the end of the day she was tired with no energy left to study and do her assignments. Consequently, she was falling back in her studies with decelerating academic performance. However, when she realised this, she resigned from the job and gave that time for self-study and recreation. As a result, her performance rocketed significantly. This shows how job can negatively affect a kid’s the learning efficiency.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the teenagers should not indulge into job while they are pursuing education. This is because the job not only takes the time away from studies but also has adverse effects their education and academic performance. Teenage is the age of learning and decision-making for the career. Thy can seek job after they join their graduation, where they can make professional contacts and learn professional skills required for the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, still, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94346978558 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96822785549 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504873294347 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9248636498 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5333333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182796309721 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504419290776 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517206375781 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135122715024 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677124594275 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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