In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
In some countries throughout the world it is quite common for teenagers to have a job. While some might argue that they are too young or irresponsible, more often than not that is simply not true and it is a good thing for teenagers to have jobs. While working they can learn to be more responsible, they can acquire new passions and skills, and they can also save some money. These are important life lessons and learning them while still a teenager can be a valuable acquisition.
An initial learning experience a job can offer a teenager is responsibility. A job requires that a person be timely and presentable, which are two lessons many parents take on for their children by driving them to school and putting out clothes for them. Working makes a teenager accountable for themselves in terms of being present and completing their job well. Since a manager doesn’t give a grade, but instead will simply fire someone for performing poorly, many people are forced to give their best effort and hold themselves accountable for the work they do. This lesson of responsibility will go far with teenagers for the rest of their life.
Aside from personal management, jobs also teach people valuable skills. Many people handle money and do simple math at work. Likewise many people also need writing and communication skills to complete their job. Learning to communicate orally and in writing can be an important ability that teenagers will use in almost every job they have. While acquiring those valuable skills, teenagers can also gain some interests and then make informed decisions about their future education choices. Some teenagers learn they have an interest in cooking, marketing, art, or books through the jobs they have. These additional skills are invaluable to turning teenagers into hardworking adults.
Finally, teenagers learn about earning and saving money by working. Through earning a paycheck people can understand how to save money for a later time. If teenagers begin working before they have the large expenses of adults such as houses and cars, they have a chance to save some money for their futures. This gives them a leg up when it comes to approaching their future. People are always better off when they have the ability to stash away a few more dollars for a later date.
In conclusion the benefits of working as a teenager make it a very good idea for anyone with the potential. Young people can learn the value of responsibility as well as social and work skills that will last them a lifetime. A job at a young age also allows people to begin saving and better preparing themselves for the future. Ultimately teenage workers have many valuable things to gain from working at a young age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, likewise, so, still, then, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91810344828 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60458627218 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484913793103 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5440227671 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.28 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.56 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219120028268 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752140918901 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055974412962 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14096151358 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592788737871 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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