Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Schools play a very important role in everyone’s life. There are plethora of methods the schools acquire to enhance the student’s educational experience. Some people think that children should spend whole of their day on academic studies; however, others disagree with this. Considering the benefits, I believe physical exercises should be a part of everyday’s school schedule for students for the following reasons.
First, doing daily physical exercise, curbs the negative effects of a sedentary lifestyle . without school’s initiative, its difficult to develop a positive behaviour towards such healthy habits like physical fitness. For instance in the past, when my father was in school they only had academic classes to attend. Thus, he we never into fitness and less active physically. This led him to some serious health issues like hypertension and obesity at a very early age . On the contrary, the school I studied in introduced fitness sessions everyday. As a result, I absorbed this habit in my behaviour and still routinely go to the gym. I believe I learned this behaviour from my school days which has helped me stay physically strong even when I am 38.
Moreover, regular fitness training, significantly enhances a student’s academic performance. Research suggest that while doing strength and endurance training there is release of neurotransmitters which elevates the mood. Thus,doing exercise before the classes, the students can start their studies in a fresh mood. Moreover, this training increases oxygen level in the body which is utilized by the brain for its plasticity. Evidence avers that this brain plasticity is essential to develop the intellectual skills like critical thinking, problem solving and so on. This shows how regular workouts in school can upsurge children’s academic performance.
In conclusion, I like the idea of introducing regular physical exercises in children’s curriculum in schools. This practice will not only limit the consequences of sedentary lifestyle but also facilitate student’s academic performance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69936708861 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20596828818 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.629746835443 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.8367363538 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.05 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260822506215 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734145138768 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784639877226 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163515601842 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118872605673 0.0645574589148 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.48 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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