Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. At Universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries, and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The educational institutes still face controversies on funding which campus facilities. Some are of the opinion that, in college, the social activities and sports are as important as classes and library and should share equal financial aid , however, others hold an opposite view. Considering the merits and demerits of both the sides, I support the idea of universities funding the social activities and sports just as library and the classes for the following reasons.
To begin with, all the educational colleges share identical academic program, it’s these extracurricular activities which sets the institute apart from other institutes. This uniqueness motivates and attracts more students for admission. For example, the Ivy League institute in Pennsylvania. It is famous for the victories of its Football team. My cousin, enduring a strong passion for football, always wanted to seek for his higher studies from the Ivy league University of Pennsylvania and so he diligently maintained his academic and sports record get into that college. Not only this, recently I went through a newspaper article which found that students like my cousin actually look forward to pursue education from colleges which are known for their on-field victories. It’s the dedication, loyalty and fund the colleges pay to nurture such facilities in their campus.
Moreover, these days, the institutes face economic issues while funding the campus facilities due to limited resources. However, financially aiding sport activities could stimulate profit for whole of the institute. For instance, My uncle is the head of the sports department in a famous medical institute in my hometown. Once we were having a conversation about the significance of organising matches and annual sports-meet for the medical students. Surprisingly, I learned that these sports activities are not only exciting and motivational for the students but also profitable for the university. He explained how these events make money by sponsorships, ticket sales and so on, which is later used for the college campus development like dormitory renovation, revising skills lab, maintenance of campus gym and swimming pool. Although, this is not an ideal way of earning money, but a pragmatic solution in today’s financial crisis.
In conclusion, I vehemently support the idea that the universities should equally fund the sports and social activities similar to the libraries and classes. This is because such facilities set the college apart from the other colleges which would encourage more student admission and, because such activities will bring financial profit for the institute.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ary and should share equal financial aid , however, others hold an opposite view. ...
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Line 2, column 702, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to pursuing'.
Suggestion: to pursuing
...ts like my cousin actually look forward to pursue education from colleges which are known...
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Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...r instance, My uncle is the head of the sports department in a famous medical institut...
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Line 4, column 357, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing financial profit for the institute.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.542997543 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94223837039 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55773955774 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5636940792 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.736842105 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4210526316 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153159442634 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541893235768 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796289561265 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12828155299 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0895523527488 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 10.002688172 165% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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