Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.
There has been a long debate about whether people should make themselves full of effort to earn large amounts of money rather than enjoy an easy life with the few pays. Some people believe it is necessary to make a lot of money to have a better life and let their children be able to have higher education. But personally, compared with making more money, we need to focus on well-being. Maybe you couldn't enjoy this money you earned because of the anxiety and stress, which would be possible resulting in the cancer.
To begin with, people who just invest a little time to work can have more time to accompany their family on weekends. Even though they don't have a high position and money, they can be able to enjoy more happiness from their wife or daughter and the most important thing is that they get an opportunity to recover the energy and kill the stress from the work. They would have more creativity and more energetic when he backs to the job next week.
Comparing with the people who earn a comfortable living, they have more stress and less time to have a rest, which will increase the risk of cancer or other diseases. I have read one news which reported a man who became the CEO just at 30 years-old, but dead at 35 years old because of the heart disease. Admittedly, he succeeded and got a big achievement on business but lose life at the best period in his life. There is an old saying that has time to earn, have no time to spend.
In a nutshell, the ordinary job not only gives you more time to do something you like but also benefits your body. We do not deny the importance of money and the job. We just pay more attention to personal well-being and health. These are the reason why I prefer to earn a comfortable living.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, well, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40740740741 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28761800988 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561728395062 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1555354631 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86666666667 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144637229626 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539137162198 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045163957975 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0910990411328 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484981080059 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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