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Most Advertisements make products seem much better than they really are

I agree with the statement that advertisements make products more captive than they really are. I think advertisement is one the proficient way to promote the product in the public platform. It is only way to make buyer intrigued to purchase the product. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the following paragraph.
To begin with, Many smart vendor spend almost half of their money in advertising their product by using eminent celebraty, which is legit because it is only way to lure buyer to purchase their product. For example, In advertise of XYZ energy drinks the fatigue mountaineer drink the XYZ enerydrink and get recharged by that drink and he will be able to climb the mountain fast. This level of advertisement create much impact on young and they will believe that the drink is really recharging that's why this famous mountaineer carry this drink with him and able to succeed his trek. This promote more selling of that drink.
Secondly, Nowdays many young tries to imitate the famous celebraty. They are so fascinated by the product they use, wear such as shoes. In sports many of us wants to wear the same brand and appearance of the shoe like Ronaldo and Messy wear. For example, Sports Shoes industries inorder to sell their product they want to make us believe that their shoes brand are comfortable and easy to play many sports so, they will hire many famous football player and make them wear their shoes. so, by following that we fell into the trap and buy that.
Its certainly clear that without advertisement product wont get value so, inorder to make them sell there should be top-notch advertisement of it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 218, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (In) must be used with a third-person verb: 'advertises'.
Suggestion: advertises
...purchase their product. For example, In advertise of XYZ energy drinks the fatigue mounta...
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Line 2, column 492, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...eve that the drink is really recharging thats why this famous mountaineer carry this ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 485, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... player and make them wear their shoes. so, by following that we fell into the tra...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
really, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, i think, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 287.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78048780488 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48928795623 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526132404181 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0903308388 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262350345786 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952385399073 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101664840597 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169517868486 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672755849492 0.0645574589148 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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