Some young adult wants independence from thier parents as soon as
There is no shortage of opinion on to wants freedom as soon as we became adult. Personally, I believe that, the best way to explore and evolve ourself is to staying out from our comfortzone. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraph.
To begin with, We all do love our family and it will be very difficult for all of us to be away from them but at the end of the day to we do have to from our own good shake. My personal experience is a compelling example of this, after my higher education I wanted to go for my further education in another state of country which was far from my settlement. My parents were not agreed about my decision becasuse that was the first time i was going away from home. It was first difficult for me, but at later i was able to do stuff by my own like cleaning, cooking etc.and was able to manage all things by my own. so, being far from home was opportunity for myself to grow in every aspect of life. It makes me more mature than my age. For this reason, i think that was the best decision of my life and got great chance to shape myself.
Futhermore, being independence from our guardence in every aspect like being financial independence. Drawing from my own experience, After completing my studies i was away from my home to do some internship which was comparatively quite expensive. At that time, i managed to support my family by doing some work in cafe by which i can make my own pocket money. At that time, i realized was sitting with family and shouting for money and wasting it was easier task. I realized that after working on my own and managing stuff by my own. It makes me realize about the value of money Moreover, After that i used to be spendthrift and utilizing it in a good way and better place.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that isolating ourself from family makes us realize and learn many things which we cant by staying on the lap of mother and father.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, i feel, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.30458221024 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45310860065 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485175202156 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7305481929 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9411764706 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118832725218 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045448126165 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522236653504 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784343235839 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317114906706 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.66 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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